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Twenty Something

6:00am

 

Designer jeans hang, fresh

from the cleaners, biting her lip,

she knows it's that time of the month

as water retention prohibits,

she looks at them like

a junkie needs a fix.

 

9:00am

 

She sits in bed, text messaging

in curlers, with carrots and yogurt,

watching the first season of

"Sex in the City," she fancies herself

a ‘Carrie Bradshaw' type.

Twenty-seven messages, none priority,

"Who the hell is Demetrius?"

 

12:30

 

Lunch with a girlfriend

in her latest purchase, a strapless

scarlet red Christian Dior dress

with matching red heels and bag,

worth every penny.

 

Girlfriend greets with a fake, distant hug

and exclaims, "Damn girl, aren't you the hot

cock magnet today!" She smiles.

 

 

 

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I'll take door number one please for seven hundred!

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 21, 2008
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    nice vignette

    well painted picture of today. Thank God not all are like that, but more than need be.


  • Sprite silver member
    August 16, 2008

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    I love your free flowing style and the cut of your pants, so to speak. I fear that this is a description of way too many women today. (And a few men too!) The last line is perfect too. I think the thing I like the best about this poem are the tag lines at the end of each stanza. Love that punch. I truly enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest. ~ Joyce


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 16, 2008
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    You have done well to capture a certain type of woman here.
    Enjoyed reading this.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    You showed the superficiality of supposed sophistication nicely here dear. I like your way of taking everyday things and turning them into something entertaining to read.

    Best wishes in the contest

    Love Margaret


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 16, 2008
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