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The Matchmaker



She gazes in the mirror of the sea
To rearrange the clouds that form her veil
She always tries to look her best for me
Although she knows for me she cannot fail
Her perfect face delights the midnight sky
And silver-plates the crests of every wave
The milky way can only watch and sigh
And every star declares he is her slave
The Moon now rules the kingdom up above
Yet waits for you and me to meet below
There cannot be a finer mood for love
Than meeting in the Moon's immortal glow
  The pleasure of the goddess Artemis
  Is realised when you and I first kiss



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Artemis being a Greek goddess often associated with the Moon

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  • Lulu Gee silver member
    August 24

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    The first line is wonderful, 'She gazes in the mirror of the sea' and the picture is perfect to compliment your beautiful, passionate poem.

  • Purrsanthema
    August 15

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    The photograph is an astonishment; the poem is a wonder. It's so very hard to pick out things that hit me so: the whole sonnet, like the moon, is luminous. I think the one mentioning her silver plating the crest of every wave is so original, the next two lines are so swooningly beautiful! "the milky way can only watch and sigh/ and every star declares he is her slave". Then, the next two lines: how clever and beautiful the contrast:the moon ruling up above, and you two meeting in the moonlight down below.
    Wonderful! I wish my little friend bat would have thought of the moon and stayed out of the house! At least I have a lovely little tome of moon poems to read while I'm holed up here in my office!

  • black is black
    August 12

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    "The Moon now rules the kingdom up above
    Yet waits for you and me to meet below
    There cannot be a finer mood for love
    Than meeting in the Moon's immortal glow" You never cease to amaze me

    !! I hope you don't get tired of hearing this but... that was beautiful lol   I loved the picture as well


  • condor gold member
    July 4

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    Awesome! This piece really said something and was filled to the brim with full on passion. I especially adored the line,
    ' And every star declares he is her slave'

    That line on its own had a fantastic impact on me. It spelt out the love that was woven within these words. The moonlight is nothing short of astonishing. I spend many nights out with my scope, gazing out at the beautiful moon and the planets around. Moonlight is and has always been the time of love and passion and you captured that so well.

  • Eusebius
    October 15, 2008

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    A lovely and most potent piece of moon magic, lunar love concerning the most sensuous of satellites. I loved it!


  • Gwenevere
    August 18, 2008

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    A subject I know is close to your heart.You have spun another moolight spell with this poem.It fits the picture perfectly, Ros


  • JinSays gold member
    August 18, 2008

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    The Moon now rules the kingdom up above
    Yet waits for you and me to meet below

    Artemis, yes. This poem is superb. Truly, one in a million, and the story is very beautiful.
    At this point, it's a coin toss.
    I can say you worked a lot of magic into it.
    So now, did you get to write for all three moons?

    I have more...lol
    kidding.
    no haiku, I agree with Mairi
    Thank you, again.
    Your brilliance has not gone unnoticed.
    jin


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 16, 2008

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    My moon is always a joy to read about-never fails to send me off to paradise and this does well and truly-
    Bumpy


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 16, 2008
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    Waits for I? Have you suddenly become Rastafarian?

    What can I say? You're at it again. If I only give you two bunnies, will you write something else?


    • cricketjeff gold member
      August 16, 2008

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      fixed

      It is a contest about the moon,


      • Mairi bheag gold member
        August 16, 2008

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        Yes I noticed it was a contest about the ruddy moon. Made for you, I'd have said.

        If you start writing haiku, steer clear of autumn. For my sake.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 16, 2008
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    Good stuff.

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    superb....you amaze me time and again
    at how easily you can open your heart
    and let such beauty spill. Love, Lane

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