her reflection
warped; destroyed
in her stomach
a growing void
her eyes have darkend
her vision's a blur
her mirror image
isn't her
she can barely stand
shaking knees
but an overweight girl
is all she sees.
just one more day
can she make et till then?
she's starving herself
but she's still not thin.
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Sad, but too true tale, and a wonderful rhyme and meter her... a very fine poem, indeed, and I love it a ton!!!
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i think i shall comment on this again.....
powerful words
your emotions are very genuinely portrayed and bring about a scenario that I think society is, unfortunately, all too familiar with
very well penned -
amazing!
wow...such intense emotion...i can soo relate to this. for readers u can really feel how people with issues like these feel. well done! keep up the good work!
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such truth in this so sad so so sad but the reality of it is so many people that are over weigh feel this way they can not see the true beauty that lies within them all they see is whats on the outside and they don't believe they are beautiful because of the way they look.
you did a fantastic job with this
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barb you make me sad
but this is a really realistic view of how that happens
or how peopel with those issues feel
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you have a great rhyme scheme and flow in this poem. and you convey your thoughts well
it's truly sad to think that girls can't see how beautiful they really are and instead let the mirror define them
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Dark background to 'reflect' dark thoughts. It's a pity so many people use mirrors to judge by and not ears. People's words and actions are a better guide.
Jim
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