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The mind Of An Anorexic ( T.M.O.A.A)

I think like you
Talk like you
And have always wanted to be you
In the mirror
Unfortunately, all I see
Some fat girl looking back at me
Where’s my size five
Under my chest and thighs
Please come out
You no longer have to hide
Why haven’t I done it yet?
I’m such a punk, I’m too scared
To kick out the jelly and tell they can’t stay here.
Understand it
You don’t, but they do
Try to put a smile on
But after all I’ve been through
There’s nothing in this smile but a teary eye and cold heart.
Trying to make myself feel better
Only puts me back where I start.
Which is looking down at this lump with a navel
What’s called baby fat is now called evil.
It disgust me
And I disgust myself
Try to join lots of sports but what does that help
Not one thing and that hurts real bad
Didn’t wanna write this cuz I didn’t know I felt it
Just trying to play with the cards I was dealt with.

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this is my 1st poem. s h a t t e r e d b e a u t y

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  • emma...
    August 30

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    Very well written; these emotions are so powerful. For your 1st write, this is great!
    Wonderful job.
    Please put your user name, plus a link to your other entry in my contest, in the author's notes. Fix that as soon as possible, por favor
    Thank you for entering, and good luck


  • masked-monster
    August 3

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    For you first poem it was a good write. I know I felt this way before and so have many others Im sure. This is how it starts.. Why do we feel the need to please everyone but ourselves? We need to lear to love ourselves and be happy with what we have, but unfortunatly it doesn't work that way! Good luck in the contest!


  • charmander13
    December 11, 2008

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    Welcome to AP and this is a really good poem .

    Continue writing and wish you all the best yeah.

    Oh yes, I just wrote a poem about anorexia and maybe you'd like to take a look at it?

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4849403

    Hope you can relate yep


  • Sunkissed xo
    December 10, 2008

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    this poem is very moving. it really speaks so much about the world we live in, how body image means so much to us and the way others percieve our appearance. you write with maturity beyond your years here - a very powerful write. i don't know if this was intentional, but the structure of the poem creates a picture of someone's body, skinny at the top for the head and getting more broad for the rest of the body. but really, this is a great write. i hope you're not really speaking about yourself here, but if you are and you are having some trouble with this in real life, please message me and we can talk about it if you need help. thanks for entering the contest


  • delightfulmess silver member
    September 19, 2008

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    This is your 1st poem Goodness.
    Well done.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • nevadapoet
    September 6, 2008

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    What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
    Nevadapoet


  • Lsh-x
    August 27, 2008
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    I like this piece! ALOT!

    I know where you're coming from if you read my poems I think you'll find Anorexic ones, and also view the groups i'm in.

    I understand this vent, and yet it feels so much more personal.

    Great write, Well done. And Thanks for entering


  • Hebz
    August 24, 2008
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    Amazingly expressed, I felt it so well!

    Thnx for entering & Best of Luck : F

    GloriousGift
    Heba

  • the evil angel
    August 16, 2008

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    Woah! Stanzas please! PLEASE!!! Now, then. that's my little rant (break it into stanzas) and now we can get down to (break it into stanzas) buisness. A lot of people feel the effects of society's media. Not going to start with that, because it'll trigger another of my rants. I have many topics that always end up triggering rants. Sensitive topics. Anyways, I really like this. I would really like to thank you for opening up on this. I get to see you through this poem. I don't get to see what you wrote, I get to see you. And I love that about this poem. So thank you for this. It is lovely. It just needs stanzas. Add stanzas and you'll have yourself a wopnderful poem.


  • broken-angel
    August 16, 2008
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    great write xxx

  • the evil angel
    August 16, 2008
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    You're missing two things in your AN. Put them in real quick?


  • SongOfSilence
    August 16, 2008

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    "There’s nothing in this smile but a teary eye and cold heart."

    Hey X] great write! Serious.. you are talented. =D This is awesome... and it's you're FIRST poem? ^^ Keep writing, ne? ^^ I'll be sure to keep reading.

    ,
    Aiden

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