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Flowers for the Dance (Emily Reminisces)

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We saved the corks

for the fishing trips we never took.

All that's left now is midnight,

smoke ascending in silence

towards an open sky,

never holding us close enough

to lift these bent wings.

I watched him with a swollen heart

while he slept and I couldn't.

I don't think he knew.


I loved the arcane surrounding him.

Inhaling the haze

left by alcohol, feeling the density

of cologne & perfume mingled with sweat,

I'd remember the time he gave me roses,

laughing well into dawn.

Not fresh & fragile in a delicate vase,

but a thin branch poked into a mound of striated soil

as he whispered "patience ~

the blooms will come when they're ready".


I'm still waiting,

wandering alone


in this damnable drifting

of torrential truths...








Author notes







Art: "Spanish Gold" by Robin Sparrow


Picture courtesy of PerfectImperfection





for Scott, the king of romance, who deserves so much better than this insufficient poem...



& for Richard...the best friend anyone could have...







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  • marc creamore
    September 5, 2008

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    Swan . . . You call this insufficient!?!? I call this one of the most powerfully voiced pennings I have ever read by you (and you know that I have read many) . . . Some of the images put forth in this piece simply had me shaking my head at the raw beauty they possess . . . If this be insufficient, then damn it, give me more girl . . . I LOVED THIS!!!

    Marc


  • Sherry gold member
    September 4, 2008

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    I felt a sadness to this through the hope in longing and then what was and sadness of changes of what isn't to be.
    Heartfelt piece Wanda beautifully done can surely reflect how much one can mean to the heart and hope for the best and that perfect fairy tale ending of the princess and white horse to be forever. Congratulations on the trophy.

  • tigress3737
    September 4, 2008
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    Great flow and it had a captivating atmosphere. Excellent!


  • S A Adelmann
    August 19, 2008
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    Did I forget something when I was here before?


  • shastadaisey123
    August 18, 2008

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    excellent

    truth is a vicarious thing, flitting here and there and then the bud opens, fragrance wrapped around the heart...squeezing the last drop of reality...blood red screams into the darkness amongst moss and stones she wept


    very, very good ..a Scott thing for sure, your poetry touches me
    Freda


  • dame de la riviere
    August 18, 2008
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    Beautiful and graceful.


  • tomisb
    August 17, 2008

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    Ah, but sparrow, you know how to wait and so love continues to be a gift that is shared even long after the celebrants are separated. This gift that keeps midnight from being more than time passing and creates vision that allows for truth to be seen, this is the strength you share with the world and we are all larger from it.
    Love, Tom B.


  • zochit2me gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    Simply delightful and fragrant




    ♥Becky♥


  • kaibab silver member
    August 17, 2008

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    So powerful and full of hpoeless awareness...quite a tug on the soul...scribe of prairie pennance to ponder


  • klassy lassy
    August 17, 2008

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    I love the story in this, which shows such a depth of love in the waiting and remembering that is overwhelming in a the silence and fragrance of roses yet to bloom. I have to believe "his" prediction.

    You know how I am about roses, yellow ones. Your corks are dangerous, girl! I'm swallowing my heart again reading this. I concur heartily with your other fans... you poetry is love lingering lovely, too!

    Love, Karen


  • S A Adelmann
    August 16, 2008
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    Thank you for this, Wanda. I am honored by this and by this contest.


  • Allyce May gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    As I was reading this I kept thinking to myself "I love that stanza" and I kept thinking that until eventually I reached the end I guess that means I loved it all! Honestly, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Very poignant; very moving.

    "as he whispered "patience ~
    the blooms will come
    when they're ready"."

    Such a beautiful underlying message



  • Rovingone gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    That simmers. What a potent write. I just can't imagine you writing anything that isn't beautiful.

  • mimiagatha
    August 16, 2008

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    impeccable, dear lady, you are miles ahead... or is it above?... us

    • Night Hope gold member
      August 16, 2008
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      Nope...I'm still tryin' to catch up with the rest of ya. Thank you, my Friend. Lovely to see you here once more.

  • marc creamore
    August 16, 2008
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    Swan . . . there are times when the tender fragrance of your words simply overwhelms me . . . You have a way of reaching into the heart of the reader and giving it a gentle caress . . .

    Marc


  • Providence
    August 16, 2008
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    Such tenderness.

    Well done, dear Wanda!


  • arafura gold member
    August 16, 2008
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    Beautifully done. Wonderful.


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    Only you can write a dedication like this;
    no one else. This is lovely, Vlindertjie.



    ~ Nicolette


  • MuddyKing
    August 16, 2008
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    sounds like Scott wearin' a Wanda mask
    love it

    • Night Hope gold member
      August 16, 2008
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      Perhaps, Richard...yet, when I first began reading Scott's incredible work in 2004, I was always struck most by the tenderness within his words...even on the more raw & visceral ones. He can howl & growl all he wants, but we all know that on the inside beats one of the biggest, bestest hearts on this site. His love poems are some of the most lingering, lovely pieces I've ever read. Only a TRUE Romantic could pull that off. Thank you for honoring our Friend in such a unique way, Scribe. Love ya both.


  • apples fell
    August 16, 2008

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    Just lovely Wanda.
    That's all I have to say.
    Sorry for the short comment,
    but you know if I could,
    I would certainly say more.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    Wow...*sigh* your words are magic Wanda, and your pen is the wand.


    All the best,
    with much love,
    mj.


  • Griswold silver member
    August 16, 2008

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    Very well done, a fitting tribute. It has the Scott-like feel to it. Best of luck to you in the contest.


  • just mercedes gold member
    August 16, 2008
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    romantic dedication, well done


  • Cherokee
    August 15, 2008
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    That's beautiful!

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