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Flea Ring Circus

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Fireflies sparked intensity,
caused celebratory commotion.

Near pupils pulled desire,

twitches of hourglass silently

stitched luminous perspire.

 

Frail bones serenade, mingle, and

swat to play keep-away in merriment's

surreal grounded cloud-journey.

  

Faint scent of thunderstorms
bellowed our caressed name,

 

feint destiny.

Nothing glimmered, however, as sensual as
the touch of your gazed glint ...

except fleas like us.

Author notes

30 to 60 words/ 1 hr

Option 6
image credit: http://asaenath.deviantart.com/art/Danse-Macabre-48972759

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  • Soft-Rain gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    this was so great! I loved the imagery i got while reading and the take was excellent.
    you have a way with words my friend!

    Well done!
    ~Lisa~


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    well you did it once again. You've written a brilliant poem.. the metaphors, the imagery you have used is incredible and outstanding. I just love the title.

    excellent take on the prompt and with your poem

    good luck

    kat


  • PerfectImperfection
    August 16, 2008

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    A very well penned take on the image prompt, and going so well with the tasteful title lol. Excellent imagery as always, wonderfully abstract and purposed poise throughout. Kind of sultry in its own way. Nicely done my dearest!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    Wow; you capture a picture's beauty with your words, but your go beyond that. You bring it to life with your vivid & jumping-off-the-page metaphors & imagery. You really know how to handle your words; as they shine brilliance for miles!

    This was truly amazing.. as every other one of yours. Good luck in the contest

    ~BAM Babie


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    very interesting take. i like the imagery, wording.

    Frail bones serenade, mingle, and
    swat to play keep-away in merriment's
    surreal grounded cloud-journey.

    ~ that's pretty cool! well done!

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