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(untitled poem about a beautiful girl)

She's a schizophrenic basket of beauty
Made all the more delicious by her untouchable nature
Fear her and she's made of sex

Her lips murmur words only thought in nightmares
And they come out sugar-spun to caress the listener into oblivion
While her eyes soak through the bedsheets

As if that weren't enough to worry about
Her winning smile hides her barbed teeth
And those eyes, once so lusted after
Become tantalizingly poisonous

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Inspired by picture A

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  • Desire gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: (untitled poem about a beautiful girl)
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: she's made of sex-Quite the interesting use of words- I kept being shown reference to a Bordello- whether a physical one or feeling like working in one-being used- connected to this beautiful girl- after reading again- *barbed teeth* now this I kept being shown a reference to a muzzle as if kept quite about ilicit activities- but labeled a Demons puppet -however that is to be interpreted-
    - Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully this makes some sense~
    Excellent take on the prompt ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~