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She is *pretty* in a fucked u kind of way.
With her acetone toxicity && cyanide nightmares;;
cheap perfume and pixie sprinkles
m e l o d r a m a t i c
man!c depression
acid soaked addictions burn though her bleeding speakers
so much gorgeous insecurity && no outlet
p to
fuck it u love d
break d her e
o a
w t
n h
her razor rinsed {obsessions}
neon romances &
pretty plastic pills
shot gun – hip bones
glamour makeup whore
lithium lies and alibis
toxic faerie dust
*&&*
glass glitter
shatter her and leave the mess
-unless-
you truly want
.::her::.
A contest entry
- toxic waste rainbows and self-destructing love letters. by deadpixie020.
900 points, ended August 16, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Don't Mind Me [[I'm Only Dying]] --- Dirty Pretty Contest by EvenStarsBreak--x.
600 points, ended October 26, 2008, 67 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Feel! by Walking Oxymoron.
450 points, ended September 30, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i absolutely adore the second stanza of this. i just love the way it was written. you have a lot of talent, and i definetly think im going to check out more of of your stuff.
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Awsome.
I was going to entere the contest until I read this. I'm suffering from writer's block and my poems are too old to impress anyone, I'm sure. So I hope you win, you should this poem is a dream.
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This was a great poem. Absolutly loved it and i love reading this style i think it's amazing how it expresses further than words what the poem is about... if you get what i mean? but it really was an amazing write. well done and best of luck.
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Quite dirty and very very pretty. =] I .::Loved::. it, wonderful imagery. Defiantly adding it to the finalist list! Thank you for the entry, Good luck.
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This a good poem, great imagery... I have contest going right now on my page, open for another week, you should try it with this talent...!
m e l o d r a m a t i c
man!c depression
I'm loving that bit!!
Yeah, how do you get the colours??
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sweet work with colors; i wish i was more than just a free member so i could do that
. this reminds me of the old dp, all that glamour faerie stuff. but i liked it. i had a little bit of an issue with the fourth stanza 'cause i had some trouble reading it [i think it was supposed to say fuck it up/break down/love her to death? am i right? haha] but the rest was pretty. it seemed like mostly you were describing her rather than continuing the thought process, but i liked the last stanza a lot. it's really bitter and honest and that's fabulous.
"acid soaked addictions burn though her bleeding speakers
so much gorgeous insecurity && no outlet"
--my favorite, i liked the idea of bleeding speakers.
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wow, that's pretty awesome. i love how you have the words doin their own thing ^^ that's cool.
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Thought Provoking
Interesting use of color to emphasize certain words. The updown/todeath part loses a bit of punch in typed form, because you can't get it perfectly aligned but still a nice way to form the message. I enjoyed the personification and the implied oxymorons. The last stanza rings true for most of the broken relationships in the world. Great work yet again.
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