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Falling of a Dream

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Fall
  tremble
forget

I'm nothing
   but everything
you'll never know.

Forbidden lies
       that tango
              knives

Swallowed skies
consuming hearts.

Be still,
       silent
whisper

      I remembered

you ought have known.

Presist questions
that fiddle your tongue
into blood splattered
                   paint.

Dance me
    the moon
on agile ankles,

      you'll know pain.

Voice virtuous
              slander
be a ballerina
  and
       pretend

 

you know. 

Author notes

30-60words
picture prompt
http://aleksandra.deviantart.com/art/Poem-1-41383226

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  • Soft-Rain
    August 19, 2008

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    Luna

    Congrats on your Bronze hun, this was a very intriging take, i loved your word use also!
    Nice very nice!

    hugs
    ~Lisa~


  • Yorkshire Rose
    August 17, 2008
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    i love this poem its so brillaintly done!


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 16, 2008
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    that last line is nice... a great piece and the layout is nice

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    Well I think that you did a great job with this sweety goodluck to you in the contest best wishes adn much love always


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    I was hoping that you would write for this prompt. you did and I'm happy. your words speak to me in a way that most I don't think would understand. the emotions that I felt while reading this, were very strong, with a sense of pain not so much hidden there, but right out in the open. your words touch me deeply, and right into the core of my heart.

    fantastic job with the poem & the prompt.

    good luck

    kat [mommy]


  • trekkergirl
    August 16, 2008
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    athis was an interesting way to write. Very creative. Good job


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    Always love the emotion in your style, in your form. Your word choices back up the emotion ... this is just brilliance: "Dance me
    the moon
    on agile ankles,

    you'll know pain."

    Truly ... very well done ... and Best of luck!

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