When I look into your eyes I see an innocent being,
A helpless creature caught in society's sneering.
What they see is a threat and a nuisance,
When what they should be seeing is a valiance.
It's not your fault people are monsters,
Teaching you their corrupt ways.
All you want to do is please,
And what you get in return is beatings.
You turn on your own kind, trying to destroy,
Just so you can prove your loyalty.
Whatever happend to not judging a book by its cover,
Have we forgot our morals or do they only apply when required?
Why would you punish everyone for one person's mistake,
Have you ever looked into your victims eyes,
Or do you know that would make your heart break.
I wish people would open their eyes,
Stop blaming the innocent and realize,
That they're punishing the wrong guys.
The problem seems to increase,
And right with it comes the ignorance.
Destroying the weapons won't stop the crime,
They'll just simply choose a new breed to ruin,
As you rack your brain trying to figure out why nothing is improving.
Author notes
-Option #4
-My issue choice was BSL. Breed-specific legislation (BSL) comes in many forms, from extra insurance policies and special licenses, to outright bans of particular dog breeds. BSL affects dogs based on appearance only and has nothing to do with temperament. It is most commonly known in correspondence with Pitbulls and pitbull type breeds because of their repuation they get from the minority of Pitbulls who are illegally trained to fight. "Punish the DEED not the BREED!"
-I'm confused923e, I've written 6 poems, I'm 16 years old, and of course "I love poetry!"
- =]
A contest entry
- I like variety so I'm giving you lots of options! by the evil angel.
475 points, ended August 27, 2008, 19 entries
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Nice, well written poem. I actually felt that it could refer to the way people often treat other people including "problem children" and it definitely holds truth. Best of luck in the contest with this piece. Nice write!!
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the stanzas are a bit long. readers like short stanzas. they're easier to comprehend and make the poem easier to read. So you should probably break up the stanzas a little bit. Now, I completely support your issue choice here. i love animals so much and I hate it when everyone shuns a certain breed just because of the minority of the breed being dangerous. I really like the way you paint the picture of it all. You almost make it sound like you're talking about other humans instead of dog breeds. It makes the reader feel more connected. Very well done here. Break it up into a bit smaller stanas and it'll be perfect in my eyes
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Is that a little better? I tried to break it up a little more.
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Thanks for following the rulez! I like your choice of issue, too!
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