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I Love You!

 

 

 

 

Passions lights up

the midnight sky

as we collide erotically

like two asteroids 

 

burning and yearning

as lust takes us over

we move in rhythm

like the waves of the ocean

 

you scream out my name

as I thrust forcefully into you

I look into your eyes

kiss your salivating lips

 

simultaneously we explode

as I whisper, "I love you!"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: http://slagophoto.deviantart.com/art/Lovers-80544145

30-60 Words

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  • Ms. Black Eyeliner
    September 4, 2008
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    aww kinda a sweet sexy great job


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    Jeremy, wow well done my friend!
    You wrote with passion and I love you at the end showed the tenderness.

    hugs
    ~Lisa~


  • Angelflower
    August 19, 2008

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    Oh this was just so sweet!!! bravo!! you really did such a wonderful job!!!The flow was so smooth and the imagery was well.. sensual and heated to say the least Lol. bravo!! thank you very much for sharing..
    Best of luck

    Angel

  • Broken-Bones
    August 17, 2008

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    I loved this, so loving and sensual and done with a lot of class as you use your words and images beautifully. I particularly liked the contrast at the end, the climax and the softness all in one hit. The idea of the oceans movements was also a wonderful way to convey this loving act. Wonderful work x


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    " I love You "
    The most beautiful words,
    one could never get tired of hearing.
    Such full of passion and love you have
    written about in this truly lovely piece
    of poetry.
    What a night, yeaning for another, I am sure.
    Sweet love making, at it's best.
    Very, very nicely done, my friend.
    Love the picture...

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • trekkergirl
    August 16, 2008
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    nicely written and I thought the picture went well with the poem. Good job

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