Fingers hold tight to my spine
And my ink begins to flow
But the words, they just aren't mine
And I'm forced to write this show
"My love," he writes, a lie to start
For he has such fake affections
He's going to break this poor girl's heart
With his words of sweet deception
"Forgive me please, I meant no harm"
Oh what stupid lies you tell!
If I only bore but a single arm
I'd throw you straight to hell
This is too much for me to write
Though unwilling as I am
My ink goes dry just out of spite
He shakes me, shouting, "Damn!"
He throws me, careless, to the side
And grabs my brother's throat
I watch him as he's forced to write
Such false words our master dotes
But at least it's not my ink
There's no pretty lies from me
Acting like it's what he thinks
But, I'm sorry, I disagree
Author notes
Option 6...I hope I did this right :/
A contest entry
- Be Prompt by Darkwell.
1050 points, ended August 20, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Promise...sing
Significant potential ... suggestion in verse III
"Forgive me please, I meant no harm"
Oh what stupid lies you tell!
If I only bore but a single arm
I'd throw you straight to hell
SHOULD read : accusative not vocative case
"Forgive me please, I meant no harm"
Oh what stupid lies he'd tell!
If I only bore but a single arm
I'd throw him straight to hell
verse II
"My love," he writes, a lie to start
For he has such fake affections
He's going to break this poor girl's heart
With his words of sweet deception
COULD read
"My love," he writes, a lie to start
Affection artificial
He's going to break this poor girl's heart
Deception supperficial.
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Did it right?
this was brillient! WOW i love the contempt the pen has for the writer Wonderful
He throws me, careless, to the side
And grabs my brother's throat
you totally made the pen a person here
WTG! Good luck in the contest
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