the world may go round
but its not powered by love
maybe not even hate
it moves on its own motives
as so every thing else follows suit
people do things to get things
it could be to make them selfs feel good
it maybe to make them selfs feel better
it maybe to make money
a mother who troughs her self
in front of a bullet for her kid
is so she doesn't have to feel the pain
of losing her child
the boy hurt her so
he tries to say sorry
so he can stop feeling guilty
working class slave away for hours
so they can say they are taking
care of there family
I think the peruse of life
what ever it was meant to be
has been twisted and warped
through mankind's number one rule
"ones self comes first, every one has there reasons"
A contest entry
- Feeling Philosophical? by after-silence.
1500 points, ended August 16, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Despite the somewhat painful grammar and punctuation, I enjoyed reading this poem because I think that not only do you have an interesting perspective but also communicate it relatively well. I still think it could use some editing (peruse of life, troughs her self, etc.), and the title is incredibly cliché, but I did like reading this. I know several people who share this pessimistic perspective of the world and you did a pretty good job revealing what you believe to be the less-than-altruistic motives people have. Thanks for entering my contest!
If you want suggestions for editing this, let me know.
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