Patches is my name, and there is reason.
I have more patches then I have stuffing I think.
That is why Patches was the name I was given
When I came to stay at my latest home.
It could be said I've been around a bit.
I have traveled all over the USA
Snuggling into any little heart I could fit
Bringing smiles to faces all over the place.
I was in the hospital for a little while,
I stuck close to a little bald girl
Giving that brave little girl a reason to smile
Until she went to heaven to be a little angel.
Then I moved onto a little boy with Cistic Fibrosis
And was in his arms whenever it was hard to breathe,
Drawing on me always brought him happiness,
So I wear the ink marks he gave me with pride.
I spent time with a boy with a hole in his heart,
Then a little girl that never seemed to be well.
All my little friends lived far apart,
But they all live in the same place now.
A nice lady found out about all I've done,
So she decided I had earned my retirement.
But her own little girl still gets me out and has fun,
So I guess it isn't retirement all the way.
Author notes
What do you think? Is it too much of an epic?
A contest entry
- TEDDY BEARS!!!! by ourgirlFriday.
475 points, ended August 17, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into Gold (or silver or bronze) pt 4 by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended September 6, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
God Bless You!
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Since your author's notes are asking for what we think, here is my humble opinion, please keep in mind I am not trying to offend your poem as I know poetry is personal to it's author.
It's just totally unbelievable and a little sensationalist, like trying too hard for that emotion. Stuffed animals would be destroyed, especially ones that had been around sick children (Velveteen Rabbit, anyone).
I think you have a FANTASTIC idea here, but I personally feel that it would have worked better if each stanza was a different teddy bear special to the circumstance.
Thank you for entering the contest.
♥
whisper
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That's really precious!
I love the storyline, esp. the ending! Bears should never go into retirement. My teddy Thingol was made in the early 1900s; his brown wool exterior smoothed down and moth-eaten a bit, but dearly loved! Thank you for entering!
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