send me a storm that will blow me away
away from this life that's so bleak and gray
take me away from disappointment and pain
pain that's so deep, just breathing's a strain
nothing right here means anything to me
here is only a dead end, that's all I see
unwanted and unneeded cuts to the bone
life just a prison, in prison alone
A contest entry
- All I Have/no trophy winners please. by piccola.
600 points, ended October 15, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please be courteous and comment..NO rude or critical critiques please.
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nice rhyme and lots of feeling. Lets the reader inside to a personal and private place. thank you for entering
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The bleakness of this poem just settles on me like a stone. Sad, sad, but so well written.
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Wonderful
Such a terrific creation for the contest. So well done as always. Thank you for sharing.
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I can relate to the sadness and pain you speak of in this poem. It is hard to stay strong through all of life's turmoils, but I know you are going to make it through.
I am sure you are needed more than you realize.
Love & Hugs,
Jeannette
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good write sis
xxx judie xxx
loves ya
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Hun there are many in this crowded cell we call life and babe most of us are just waiting for the release.. life is a bitch but then you die..... but we do have each other to hold and good bad girls understand the pain and sorrow hun holding you.
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Oh I swear this could have be penned from the tears I have shed
Well said hun
♥
Stay safe
Love to you
~Manda
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I would take you away if I could...and I guess you know exactly where I would bring you too...
So sad feelings here..
But you're so much stronger than you feel right now....
One day soon will show me how strong
Hang in there beautiful Lady
XXJeannette
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Strong and so there
Hi Jeannie, great write, and I so know what and whaere this poem speaks. It seems like I have been in this place for the past year, and thanks for sharing.....joe
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