With their fists to the heavens,
Hear the people rise and revolt;
Laws based on hypocriticalism fall,
Brutality closed with a hasted jolt.
Tonight they knife the back of order,
A revolution is what the people seek;
They will not hesitate in anarchy,
The blood of government will leak.
Freedom is not just an idea,
It will become their reality;
Too many years have past,
Being victims to inequality.
They told them that they have power,
Yet they punished them when they spoke;
Only the parliament is to be at blame,
As their teachings become debris in smoke.
Author notes
Laws that are set by other peoples judgement and opinion rather than what is actually good for the people should't exist. This poem was inspired by the movie "V For Vendetta," a great one at that. Remember, remember the 5th of November.
Silvos.
Please tell me what you think
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I'm afraid I didn't see that movie, however this poem could apply to almost any war or conflict.
I don't mean to be critical, but I was wondering about your use of hypocriticalism on the third line. Would hypocrisy work just as well? Everything else I thought was very fitting and went well with the title to form an interesting read. Thanks for sharing your talent with us.
Blessings on you my friend,
Ron
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Lawful laws
So true in waht you hands pen in this poem..yes I agree laws set by others...Its like Bars against the voice of the people...
I did watch the movie I really enjoyed it..
what you pen and how you pen is different and opens my mind to a world above and beyond...
thank you for sharing such a word of art
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OH YEAH! ANARCHY NOW! WHOOOT!
uhm. yeah. so basically i love this one. as i think it holds a very strong message that people need to hear. equality. the voice of the people. not the parliament, not the prime minister (or president) the people.
the problem is, there always needs to be a leader, or everything will fall to chaos, and how can we be sure our leaders won't just ignore our needs and wants again.
so statistically i don't see a way we could get out of this, but i wish we could. democracy is no better than anarchy. they're practically the same thing.
the thing that makes me angriest though, is that even if we get to a world with no sexism, or racism, or anything. there will always, ALWAYS be one form of discrimination. Age Discrimination. Most adults do (and always will) think that they know more that children. i however know for a fact that there are full grown men, and women out there, that are stupider than the average child. that angers me to no end. (being a kid myself)
anyways i am done rambling. very powerful poem. (you always write the ones that get me ranting)
theharvester <-- is angry now
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Triumph!
This was great! Higly descriptive and expressed in an awesome rhyme with the vocabualry and the strenth could really be felt dramatically and metaphorically at the end. Awesome title, simple and effective.
Great work, I loved it, continue the talent bro!
~Emily~ xx
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wow.... yet another great write!!! ur amazing!
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