Eyelids cling; clench.
Moments fall with the rest.
Sanctuary of vanished memories.
Whisper; breathe.
Wind of premonition,
Conjectures waste away.
Rest; calm.
Slowly colour seeps in.
Reticence has its hazards.
Envisioning reality doesn't compare.
A dream; an image.
Pain encompasses.
Eyelids cling; clench.
Maybe unsure was enough.
Just another dream.
But as the deluge falls away.
A faded image remains.
Not brilliant;
Wonderfully sufficient.
It was just another dream.
Envisioning reality couldn't compare.
Author notes
OPTION 3
~ The Mistaken Picture ~
Dead Imperfections - 44 poems.
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I... Love... Poetry. XD
A contest entry
- I like variety so I'm giving you lots of options! by the evil angel.
475 points, ended August 27, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think.
Comments
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i like this take on the prompt. It's creative and unexpected. thank you for actually doing what I asked and only taking the title loosely. Most of them mentioned the title and talked about the idea of the title and that was their poem. This was diferent. It stands alone. It doesn't need the title to make it make sense. Thank you for that. I also really like the wording. you've got some good adjectives in there. i donb;t like the way you use punctuation. Some of it is a bit awkward. the punctuation disrupts the flow instead of helping it along. Other than that, it is a very good write and I really enjoyed reading it
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Missing one thing. So close! Skim over those rulez again.
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