One boy
Five girls
Emily and Betty best friends forever
Lisa and Helen never got along
Sarah the social outcast
Jolie managed to steal each heart
Emily was the first, they met over Pizza
Sarah was next; he met her crying by the steps
Lisa followed shortly with her love for ‘Linkin Park’
Helen was his favorite cheerleader
And Betty was a perfect ten… need I say more?
Jolie loved each one and but could not let go.
Emily and Betty never kept secrets but for some strange reason,
Jolie became a well-kept secret. A secret for five years.
Lisa and Helen are beautiful arrogant girls
Who never believed they would date the same boy.
Sarah could not understand what Jolie liked about her
And she did not have any friends to talk to.
They each had a day assigned to them.
Emily was Monday,
Betty was Tuesday.
Lisa was Wednesday
Helen was Thursday and
Sarah, his favorite was Friday.
They never questioned this routine
Although they found it very strange.
One day Jolie decided to end each relationship
He could not stand lying to them anymore.
Five years was a long time. He knew he held each
Of their hearts in his hands.
Emily swallowed 20 pills and downed a bottle of scotch;
Her parents were out on a romantic dinner
Sarah carved Jolie’s name into her wrist, and slashed
Her wrists several times, the pain blacked her out.
Betty filled her bath tub and took a never ending bubble bath,
Her parents broke open the door and found their dead daughter.
Lisa drove her car over a cliff on her way to the hospital,
Her mom had a severe heart attack and almost died. She wished she did.
Helen killed the baby inside her with a coat hanger
And she bled to death.
One boy
Five deaths.
Author notes
Option two.
A contest entry
- Creativity Contest! by misshugglebugglez.
400 points, ended August 16, 2008, 19 entries
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this piece has an interesting tone...your lines are very matter of fact, but it adds an interesting aspect to the poem, I do think that this would be easier to read and help the flow, if you broke this up into stanzas maybe....nice job, thanks for entering!
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thank you
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When I first looked at this I will admit that I thought I wouldn't like it because of the way it was set out. I'm still not overly fond of the layout, I think that there should be at least minor breaks to make it easier for the reader to read but I loved the content of it.
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If other people had mentioned that I would have changed the format
but thank you all the same
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I'm speechless.
This piece was amazing.
Thank you.
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thank you so much! xx
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I wouldn't call it an exciting dream but I would call it one horrifying saga of nightmares. At any rate, it's a killer concept and it made a pretty sweet poem. It's like you took five of those sob story heartbreak things from myspace bulletin boards and made them into one piece, except this is worth reading and does not end with "send to 15 people if u evr had ur heart broken lolol"
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looool
it was exciting to me wen i was dreaming hehe but thank you all the same my saga of nightmares shall continue! xx
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Wow.
That's all I have to say.
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awww thank you!
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Damn...... 0.0
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thank you
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Oh my gosh! what a tragically dramatic poem! This was veru creative! It is so sad, yet so good. It is deep and emotional! It is hard to say which girl I felt the most terrible for. I also felt so bad for the boy! He wasn't
really cheating on any of them, he just was madly in love with them all. and he was the death for them all.
A heart- warming poem. I LOVED it very much!
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yes you get the poem! some of my friends didn't...
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HI,
Was this an acual dream you had? This was sad, I felt bad, very, very bad for the girls, and would like to slap jolie in the face, or maybe lower,
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I can't stop thinking about this poem. Bell,
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it was
yes it was an actual dream bt it came in bits everyday it took like a whole week of dreaming for me to piece this poem together... I would like to slap jolie too lool
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