Hiding behind concrete walls
My flat eyes tell you no lies
Though a movie plays off my skin
I feel nothing more but smoke within
The whispered things of summer
Now gone & blown away
Screaming fall replaces them
With winter awaiting to spin
Fading credits rolling
Riotous faces approaching
With fields of horror in their eyes
They are no valentine
Words bouncing off walls
Of pure haze & regret
Like your heart's inner thoughts
Bleeding wine over water
Time stands on end
Of hairs on your neck
Between sanity & simplicity
We hide like children
Author notes
It just kinda came to me.
It wasn't supposed to be a love poem.
But it kinda is.
In an awkward way that not many will see.
A contest entry
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Comments
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I really enjoyed reading this, and what really got me was the last line. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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One thing that I didn't like was the use of "&" instead of "and". I don't really feel that "&" belongs in poetry, unless it's dirty pretty or whatever. But that's just me. Other than that, this was a very poetic piece. I liked the ending, saying that we hide like children. So true. Good job!
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I like this. this is really good.
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bleeding wine over water thats a wonderful line i might use that some time ( ; nice write i enjoyed it, i would class this as a darker love poem
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