a breeze softly stirs
the fallen cherry blossoms
a samurai's shroud.
A contest entry
- FOR MEMBERS of HUGH WYLES FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY by hugh wyles.
1750 points, ended September 4, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm glad this gained a trophy. Congratulations, Di.
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CONGRATULATIONS on receiving HONORABLE MENTION in this contest!
<3 Maureen
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CONGRATULATIONS MB on winning HM
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Lovely image, your last line gives a pang for ironic peace after violence.
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A beautiful haiku.
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Very nice and well done imageries here.
Lovely how you connected line 2 and 3.
Mari
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Lovely imagery (except for the fallen samurai)! Excellent haiku!
Best of luck in the contest!
Maureen
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Exquisite! The best to you in the challenge dear lady. A breathtaking work of words.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Different!
Japanese cherries?
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A very pretty haiku
Hine
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Dear Diana,
I love the Japanese imagery of this haiku.
I now have "Sakura, Sakura, Cherry blossom from afar..."
on the brain and can't get it out of my mind. Lovely tune though, like your haiku, beautifully sad. I can visualise that samurai in full armour, prone on the ground beneath the tree while the pink blossom gradually covers him.
I won't think of the messy manner of his death.
Best of luck in the contest.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh (R.)
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Another good one...
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the first two lines really put a pretty image in my head.. I am trying to figure out what kinda samurai might fit under a cherry blossom leave haha
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