It's been a while since your biggest mistake.
There'll be more times soon, let go of the ache.
Just let go soon, or life will move on without you.
Can't go back now, so try hard not to.
Get on with it, deal with it, you know you must,
Don't let go of your feelings and everyone you trust.
They'll be here for you,
Their care is true.
If you go back again,
There'll be more mistakes in the end.
Stop feeling so blue,
Jump up from the trench and renew,
We'll be here for you, helping you,
up from the darkness and into the light too.
So, breathe,
Just breathe.
Hop back onto that moving line now,
knowing you got out of it - judgement somehow,
Life isn't leaving you,
Nor is your life longer askew...
Author notes
17. Breathe - Anna Nalick
I felt the need to rhyme cause of the song, and that's basically what I got from it. I directed my thoughts to my own times of need, and everything that my friends helped me to do. I tried hard to not use phrases from the song, but it's just a good song...so like I said, it was hard.
The particular lines that sparked up inspiration the most were:
"These mistakes you've made, you'll just make them again
If you only try turning around.
2 AM and I'm still awake, writing a song
If I get it all down on paper, its no longer
inside of me, threatening the life they belong to
And I feel like I'm naked in front of the crowd
Cause these words are my diary, screaming out loud
And I know that you'll use them, however you want to
Cause you can't jump the track, we're like cars on a cable,
And life's like an hourglass, glued to the table
No one can find the rewind button now
Sing it if you understand.
and breathe, just breathe
woah breathe, just breathe,"
And PS. I suck with rhymes now, 'cause I haven't done so in over a year...
[[Either 1 or 2 dunno]]
A contest entry
- the good ..the bad..and the ugly.... by redhanded.
800 points, ended August 22, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options. by MelissahhMidnite.
1364 points, ended September 30, 2008, 22 entries
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this is really good i like that song too. I feel like this a lot...even though you over come something you cant help but go back to that place everynow and again and beat yourself up over things...but you do need to look forward.
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wonderful write
good luck in the contest
MelissahhMidnit
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very nice write...
I like this ....this is a great song and one if my favorites as well
bt I am a typical rhyming poet so I know what it feels like to be ot of yor groove for a while....thankyo for entering this piece was very enjoyable...
best of luck to you in the future and with your writing...
andi
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Thanks
Yeah, I thought I kinda outgrew the rhyming thing last year. I prefer freewrite and rants...
But when listening to the song, I was like, oh crap! It should rhyme!
And then I ended up making the first two lines a small parody...>_<, cause I have a habit, and a small hobby of doing that. -
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aw yea...well it is a great song----and this write was great too....thnxxx for enetering....and best of luck 2 you in the contest and in the future...
andi
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No problem. It was a great song, yeah.
So, thanks!
-->pia♫♪
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