Fingers gripping steering wheel,
foot smashing accelerator to floor,
glove compartment full of speeding tickets,
wallet holding suspended driver's license.
Roaring wrong way down one way street
with headlights off in the middle of the night.
Hearts driving obstinacy's racecar
always ignored any, but own rules,
until hitting circumstance's wall.
Author notes
Prompt: Stubborness
A contest entry
- 50 Word PIF Contest by Riftkin.
525 points, ended August 16, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was such a wonderful take on the prompt. You created some really clear images that puts the reader on the edge of their seat. I really loved the last stanza, which was very clever and a wonderful ending. Congratulations on your gold and on a great poem.
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Perfect for the prompt, a wonderful read. Congratulations on the Gold it was well deserved. God Bless,
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This is great and shows stubbornness... about like me.
Best of luck in the contest.
Riftkin
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I think you raised my blood pressure with this one dear. The imagery is almost to vivid... You nailed the prompt perfectally. Good luck....
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Yeah, what a great job this one is!! WOW!!! and you know, some of your comparisons are beyond words!
Great take on the prompt!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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this is an outstanding poem brother.. you definitely hit the nail on the head with this one.
excellent job.
good luck in the contest
kat
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