Black in my heart
And Gray in my soul
Red in my eyes,
A fury you cannot console
Broken and twisted,
I'm losing control
I desire to bleed you dry
Numb of the pain,
Lost from all reason
Ready to make you pay for your treason
Ready to break you
Are you ready to die?
I shall crush you and damn your soul
Your end is nearing,
There's nowhere to hide
I shall have my vengeance,
You'll pay for your lies
My hatred, it burns,
But you shall burn well
I'll see you again in Hell
Author notes
ones again, i push my limits for the dark. Ive been wanting something powerful, and Im fairly satisfied with this 
. enjoy
A contest entry
- Everything You've Got by xrain dancerx.
1040 points, ended October 26, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm pretty sure the first couple of lines had me hooked, You're a verry talented poet. Keep it up
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portraying evil.... i liked it
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You have good rhyme & flow, such a menacing protaganist. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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Satisfied Taste
I loved this write. It was dark but tasty. I love poems like this. They drive me crazy and have me craving more. Hope to see more of them. -
Amazing darkness
This is a very good dark poem you've written, it grabbed me from beginning to end. The flow is excellent and rolls of the tongue. Only thing wrong, there's 5 typos I've counted, otherwise well written.
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haha thanx. I never noticed those. im not even sure i got them all
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i def enjoyed. lolz. i love dark poems. they send chills down my spine, doesnt that make the best poem?
great job and thanx fro entering.
*hugs* tay/tess.
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oh wow. I really liked this! The beginning grabbed my attention and was able to really pull my into the poem and from then on I was just hooked. But still through the whole thing, I would say that the beginning was the best lol I'm loving this though! Very dark (my type of poetry!) haha
Alex
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Ahhmazing
This was really good. It suprised me how well you do at this type of poetry. Good job. =]
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Cool
I really like they way this flows man as I read it the words went smoothly from my mind... I really like your style
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you should be satisfied with this poem.but most of them arn't like this.and i like this one because its diffrent!
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wow! i just nevver saw u lean towards the dark stuff but ur awesome at it. lolz.
*hugs* ME!!!!
u should be excited.
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