maybe it isn't that I hate who I have become
but I always hated who I was
I've been racked with guilt so long..
maybe I've grown up
and things don't taste as sweet as they once did
maybe I just got bitter
and I remember days like this somehow had a tint of pink
days like this didn't last as long
when I was with you
and perhaps I cashed my chips in too quick
maybe I was wrong
in any case I left
and now you too are gone
maybe it isnt that I miss who I was
maybe I just realised how important he was...
Author notes
parts inspired by a conversation i had with destroy me.
A contest entry
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Great job on this, i read it a few times over and each time I get a different perspective - it brings a lot of thoughts to mind. I really like how this flowed/sounds and just like many of your commenters below, I like the lines "and things don't taste as sweet as they once did, maybe I just got bitter" ...you can take that many different ways. Since I just celebrated a friends bday...it kinda made me think of getting older and how we tend to get more bitter at life, not like when everything is so exciting when you are younger and innocent. Ok, before I go off on a rambling tangent, thanks so much for entering and great job!!
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im glad you liked it
and im glad you were able to see all the parts there was to it
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I liked this. It dealth with a theme which most of us know, or will know, throughout our life. Looking back and not quite understanding how we got to where we are and so on. Good job!
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maybe I've grown up
and things don't taste as sweet as they once did
maybe I just got bitter
love that.
love the feel to it.
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yay!!!
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Well!!!!!
Cash those chips. LOL
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ohhh
i did!
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and things don't taste as sweet as they once did
maybe I just got bitter
that wa really creative. i liked that.
and aslo
maybe it isnt that I miss who I was
maybe I just realised how important he was...
that was AWESOME.
i like et. a lot.
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gracias!!!
hahah
man want to make this so much better
it deserves it...
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haa. glad i could inspire you.
i adore it all.
especially this:
"maybe it isn't that I hate who I have become
but I always hated who I was
I've been racked with guilt so long..
maybe I've grown up
and things don't taste as sweet as they once did
maybe I just got bitter"
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you are welcome...
gracias!!!
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I love it! very good, lil one!
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yay!!!
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"maybe I've grown up
and things don't taste as sweet as they once did
maybe I just got bitter"
i absolutely love that stanza.
i love it all -
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aww thanks!
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