There are crumbs in my bed
there is fog in my room
and in my eyes.
And you asked me a question,
20 times.
Each question tore deeper and deeper
and I bit my lip.
And did not answer.
"Don't you see that I do not love you?"
So I burned your photographs
gathered the ashes on my fingertips
and imagined they were your bones.
From that point on you were
no longer an enemy.
Your image remains, a chilled imprint on my brain
painful, a wood chip jammed under a fingernail.
But it is only a finger, not an arm.
So I move on.
The picture frame above my head is crooked,
but I've never felt the need to fix it.
It reminds me that I am not
The only damaged one.
Author notes
Option three
I'm wonderbandalice, I'm 14, this is my 105th poem.
"I love poetry!" Although I clearly read the rules, otherwise why would I have my name, age, and how many poems I've written in my Author notes?
A contest entry
- I like variety so I'm giving you lots of options! by the evil angel.
475 points, ended August 27, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Breakups by slippingofftheedge.
300 points, ended August 22, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What be your thoughts?
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i love how you ended it.
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thank you
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I like this poem. You're one of the few people who didn't take the title literally. It gets annoying when people revolve the entire poem around the titlwe you gave them, so thank you for not doing that. I like the way you leave the ending open. You leave the reader wanting more, giving them something to think about rather than the usual ending, be it happy or sad. I like that you leave it without one. I don't like the way you have some of the lines further into the page than others. It just seems kind of wierd to me. Sorry if that offends you, that's just a little quirk of mine. In general, thank you for entering it! It's really good! And by the way: 14 year olds totally rock
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I also changed a word in line 16.
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Thank you! This is the kind of comment I love getting.
No, it does not offend me at all.
Actually, I'm a take your advice.
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I just like to double check. A lot of people just skim.
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I know.
It's just one of my pet peeves.
Sorry
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