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Twilight of the Gods~ part one

 

 

Desperate for votes, the huddled elder gods
cast knucklbones as they had long ago
calling upon the Thunder Banger to
return from his perpetual pussy hunt
take up the standard of past glories
tromp the opposition into dust
burst like a quasar in the firmament
remember those who never forgot

Young Mary danced in needle park
had turned a thousand tricks or two

and still resembled daddy's little girl enough
to heat the groins of men and boys
She wondered who the old dude was

thatrode the 4th street bus at night
and kept his thoughts in a plain brown bag

Buzzed and fried, she staggered off
at Ninth and Plum. Scorpio stitched
the horizon, fists of cloud knuckled the moon
He had her in the backseat of a derelict Camaro
not as golden rain or smoke or randy swan
He came as a sorry drunk on disability
with fifty bucks in his wallet, spare change
and a checkered past

 

 

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  • Lute
    August 28, 2008
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    End of first verse
    forgot:

    (to indicate the change of scene. Not a rule or nuttin, just something that occurred to me.)



    She wondered who the old dude was
    that rode the 4th street bus at night

    flow doncha know--

    (usta live on South Fourth street, didn't need no bus tho, it was only 2 blocks long, if you count Trader's alley as a street.)


  • Annalise
    August 15, 2008
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    I like. A lot.


  • Cat gold member
    August 15, 2008
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    well... i don't want to claim this poem..

    you know.. own it.

    but .. - i resent the implications.

    Excellent- your voice, as i've said time and time again is stunningly good-
    your characters well developed and your style unique among men.. -

    excellent write

    m


  • malmadre gold member
    August 15, 2008

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    This is great David! I will never again look at those old men in the same way, they could be ancient gods in disguise paying a little visit to our time. It makes me wonder who was that man that I had lunch with today.

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