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In A Battle No One Wins

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Can we simply find the beauty,

in every walk of life.

Shall we look beneath the surface,

all the pain; all the strife.

 

Can we build a bridge over ignorance,

leading to unity.

Let go of our differences,

lift up humanity.

 

Who among us does not feel pain,

when hate has touched our soul.

clinging to the anger,

festering to grow.

 

Invisible wars grow furious,

from within.

Holding many hostages,

A battle no one wins.

 

Like weeds among the flowers,

their beauty goes unseen.

Taunted by the ugly,

tearing at the seams.

 

It spreads from sea to shining sea,

as waves consume the world.

As we stand by in ignorance,

while hate consumes our core.

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Wrath

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  • peregrin
    September 9, 2008
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    I really like this, it is creative.
    And true,
    very true.

    Good work, thank you for entering.


  • Death of the Author
    August 29, 2008
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    A couple of your rhymes don't rhyme to me. I really like off rhymes, but world and core, to me, isn't even that. This reminds me of my older work actually...I think you should focus more on flow, it doesn't work for me. I like what you said...you've made a pretty good go at this. Thanks for your entry.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    Such truth here

    I say Bravo for I have never seen it writen with such truth and such vision as you have written it here Bravo and yes lets all look within and get our own souls back with love for without it we will take ourselves out in time


  • ourgirlFriday
    August 16, 2008
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    Wow.

    Awesome poem!


  • Genesis
    August 15, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry. I like this a lot. It is well written with beautiful flow and rhymes. I love the imagery. But, I feel the best part is, in fact, the message. Thank you for sharing.
    --Genesis.


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    August 15, 2008

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    full of imagery

    This is a very feeling poem. I can feel the wrath in it. Great stuff.

    I enjoyed oyur rhyme and the rhythm makes the poem flow well.

    Yes, it seems that we are being consumed by evil sometimes. Brr! What a thought.


  • z etoile
    August 15, 2008

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    This was a great piece describing wrath and full of truth showing the hates as hidden wars in some people. Great job and keep writing.

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 15, 2008
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    Hello.

    A write typically showing your stance of peace and understanding, as well as compassion for fellow souls. This is written well, but stanza 4 line 2, doesn't read write, it is way too short compared to all the others, and really sticks out. Everything else read fine to me, unlike the aforementioned stanza. I wish you well in the contest.

    My regards.

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