They're blankets
silken prom dates
cotton girls next door
and that other one
the wary worn-in worry wort
with patches up the side
that look like little ducky prints
blankets
tucked away
like memories
folded in the linen closet
we never intended to exist
but it happened
time buried everything worth holding onto
and we refused to let go
because the distance between ourselves
and everything we're glad of
goes from top to bottom
of a beautiful pile
of blankets.
Author notes
it's a poem about the people we get wrapped up in. the greatest distance... is the time we've spent without the people who make us who we are.
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This is an interesting, original and thought provoking write. I like the take on the prompt too, the notion of fighting the distance. I also liked the way you have connected the idea of being wrapped up in someone with the idea of blankets - it's indicative of warmth and comfort, which is even more powerful and says alot when taken in context with the prompt.
Thank you for sharing
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Oh..I see you're a Capricorn too
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I don't think this poem needs fleshing out - it's good as it is and I for one love poetry that is short, succinct, poignant, simplistic, etc. - like this one. Such a unique take on the contest theme... a lovely sense of warmth and nostalgia here. One just wants to wrap yourself in these words! Yes, people happen to us and mostly, it's good; yes, "a beautiful pile of blankets"....sighs... I like your voice and I liked this. Thank you for sharing it with us in the contest.
~ Nicolette
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a close relationship can be a good and a bad thing, always both for me, because no one is perfect. but then again what makes the wrapping exsist is the fact that i still believe that they can be perfect for me even when they themselves are imperfect...good write greg
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This is decent but could be fleshed out a bit more, perhaps simply by using the word "people." But maybe I'm too much of a critic. As it stands, this is a very expresive, tautly written poem that I think is a worthy expression of your talent, which is exceptional. Great!!!
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How beautiful~
Love this write...
"blankets
folded in the linen closet
we never intended to exist
but it happened
time buried everything worth holding onto
and we refused to let go"
... such a wonderful analogy of those "things" (people) we cannot let go. Thanks for this one.
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