a tortoise crawls
on the highway
speeding car
by Darlene Sperber
8/14/08
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A contest entry
- FOR MEMBERS of HUGH WYLES FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY by hugh wyles.
1750 points, ended September 4, 2008, 41 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is a very nice contrast! Congratulations for your silver. 
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Congratulations on the Silver, Sis You did a great job on this haiku.
love and
Dee
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congrats
Congrats on winning the silver trophy in this haiku contest...
Excellent ku by the way
Again congratulations
Hugs
Susan~~~
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CONGRATULATIONS on winning SILVER, Darlene!
<3 Maureen
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This is my favourite in the contest.
Keep on giving us your wonderful haiku
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CONGRATULATIONS Darlene for winning SILVER
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Another good haiku. And do you remember when Dady was a recruiting sgt. in Farmington Missouri and I went there on the bus from our grandparents home in Oregon? The first evening I was there, Mamma made frogs legs and turtle for dinner. I had to force myself to try it but immedietly found it to be very tasty. I might not have liked it as road kill, though
Good luck in the contest
Love and
Dee
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Ohhh slow Tortoise! He get run over. Nasty car!
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Excellent use of contrast here!
And leaves the thought: is the car really driving fast or is just the tortoise too slow
Nicely done Darlene
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or is the world spinning too fast for some of us...Thanks for reading it and commenting...
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Awww...
Turtle soup! You kill it, you eat it! Hope that's the law in this instance. Imagery is stunning!
Poor tortise!
Excellent! I wish you well in the challenge!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Have you ever eaten turtle soup...I would like to give it a try. Always game to try new things...thanks Renee for reading and commenting...
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Oh, the poor thing!
Inevitability is written all over it!
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and drove all over it too Terry...
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Awww Darlene, that's so sad, I read the comment where you say the rednecks deliberately head for them and yes, KARMA comes back and will hit them smack bang in the face.
Great haiku
Hine
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Karma will get us all in the end...
Thanks for the comment Hine...
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Poor turtle! In this speedy world, a slow pace is not tolerated and can be fatal! Great haiku!
<3 Maureen
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We sure all need to slow down a bit...Thanks for the comment Maureen...
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Dear Darlene,
We get all sorts of things squashed on our roads but I can't recall ever having seen a flattened tortoise. Do the tyremarks show?
Good luck in contest.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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Don't know Hugh...never got that close to a dead one...too many turkey buzzards around to stop and look...besides if I did I might be flatened like the tortoise...
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OHHHH geeze, poor tortoise was too slow.
It's sad to see the dead animal on the road, last week it was a young kitten up the road, very sad.
great haiku Darlene
Love Joan
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Hi Angelica, Here the 'rednecks' aim for the tortoises as they cross the road...but I beleive in karma so they will get their comeuppance...
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A Shocking Tale Of Tortoise!
I'm guessing the Hare is behind the wheel...memory like an elephant...and twice as evil!
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You are a nut! but a lovable one..
I bet you do not have an evil bone in your body... and would not hurt a hair on the head of a hare...tortoises don't have hairs do they...
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Another very good haiku, Darlene. It contains a wonderful juxtaposition of images - the slow tortoise and the fast car. This makes the haiku resonate and work on a number of levels, which is what we want as readers from haiku.
Impressive work,
Myron
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Thank you Myron. Your opinion is valued most.
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