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…and she bleeds

She is the rhythm of

a poem unfolded

spun around  colorful rooms

 

barely breathing at times

as she sits

sifting prayers

in the empty night

determined to find function

 

she fits pieces of the sky together

in an illustration of morning rituals

as words roll

from the interior

of her tongue

 

she craves lean words

- strong words that whisper to birds

slightly hypnotic behind traumatic eyes

inside the genius of writing

 

the alphabet falls at her feet

begging to be used

sculpted into another day

like a vulnerable lover

 

behind mysterious wisdom

a mass of things emerges

with gentle persuasion

 

                 a shake and a stir

 

poetry is born

 

               - and she bleeds for us

in circumstances far beyond her control

 

 

 

8/14/08 

Author notes


Orginal prompt: Rowan

love ya Kathleen...

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  • Allyce May gold member
    September 18, 2008

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    Absolutely adore it, especially the part about gentle persuasion, the stirring and the last two lines I am totally in awe of It is Kathleen all over.

    Thanks you do much for sharing this!


    • zochit2me gold member
      September 18, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the points and the gold...



      Kathleen is my hero

      ♥Becky♥


  • Swan song gold member
    August 23, 2008
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    Wow This is simply a stunning poem!!!!! Dam you are good!


  • breedluv gold member
    August 16, 2008
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    This is a very heartfelt poem, and a joy to read.


  • Jersene gold member
    August 15, 2008
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    This is lovely...and so fitting

  • tara wilson gold member
    August 15, 2008

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    Becky - this is one of your best...this is beautiful!

    I love:
    "she craves lean words

    - strong words that whisper to birds"

    and the vulnerable lover part...excellent, a wonderful tribute poem..


    • zochit2me gold member
      August 15, 2008
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      Why thankie...

      I'll take that comment and raise ya one...lol

      ♥Becky♥


  • paulcreates silver member
    August 15, 2008

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    oh wow you nailed it here Z. This is why we love her so.
    Beautifully done!

    Paul


    • zochit2me gold member
      August 15, 2008
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      Why thank you kind sir...
      She is stellar and so much more

      f

      ♥Becky♥


  • EvilKate
    August 15, 2008

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    Yes. She does all of this and so much more.

    • zochit2me gold member
      August 15, 2008
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      She has been on my fav's since the beginning here and still amazes me

      Thank you so much for your comment



      ♥Becky♥


  • apples fell
    August 15, 2008

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    If I just said I found this poem really good and left you a flower, would you be pissed? That's what I was thinking after I read it, so, if you don't mind...


  • Randomly Beautiful
    August 14, 2008
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    That she does. Splendid writing here. Loved the last lines.

  • know one
    August 14, 2008
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    awesome!

    I love the imanary and meterphores!Great write!


    • zochit2me gold member
      August 15, 2008
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      Thank you so much for reading and commenting

      f

      ♥Becky♥

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