She touched my heart and won me with a kiss
And stole away the peace that I had known
I entered her and lost myself to bliss
I hope she'll never leave me on my own
We joined in all the ways two lovers can
Beneath the stars and witnessed by the moon
She held me and she said I was her man
Whenever we must part will be too soon
I heard her gasp and call my name aloud
A moment that I'll cherish 'til I die
Too foolish but it made me feel so proud
I'd give away my all to hear her sigh
She nibbled on my ear then gently blew
I'd hear her sigh again, oh yes, she knew!!!
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A contest entry
- Go For The Gold/Rhymers by piccola.
500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"A moment that I'll cherish 'til I die Too foolish but it made me feel so proud I'd give away my all to hear her sigh" now that was lovely!! Beautiful poem, beautiful back ground... beautiful everything! lol *sighs* lol kidding
Well done!
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This background has won my heart. The poetry was supberb as well. Thank you for entering
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Superbly sensual take on that wonderful act of bliss you so describe. I wouldnt have labelled it erotic as it read like a devotion of love rather than a sexual write. The art of being in love while making love well penned my friend
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"Too foolish but it made me feel so proud
I'd give away my all to hear her sigh"
This is an interesting way of expressing a feeling that is so common. Does anybody not feel this way in the midst of a first embrace with someone they're drunk with love for? -
This is absolutely stunning, Jeff. I loved that line, "she stole away the peace that I had known." That totally rocks!
Gorgeous!
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This is sensual, YES!!! Beautiful and gentle imagery!!!
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Boffo!
Yikes! So adult you don't even have to declare it.
Line 5 is maybe the most visual line I've read hereabouts.
Wheew.
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Assemble your best love-poems and present them to a publisher, bro. Stop casting these pearls before swine like us.
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I wish!!!
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Hey i didnt nibble, i simply whispered..wait til next time
LMAO this is awesome.
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