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Murder Gone Wrong

This poem takes place from my own bedroom
I was looking out the window glancing up at the stars
when I heard a blood curdling scream for help
then just as suddenly as I heard it
the sound simply disappeared.

Well intrigued I get up off my bed
semi awaken by that screaming sound
and low and behold to my horror
I saw a floating body in the pool
face down and the body was not moving.
Reacting as quickly as I was taught

I snatched up that phone
and frantically pounded out
the number nine one one.
The operator instantly responds
with the standard opening
" nine one one whats your emergency. "

Going through the drill over and over
within my sleepy thick skull head
I tell her in a frantic scary tone
" My my neighbor just just mur murdered someone. "
The operator asks " how old I am and also
asks where I am calling from and the address. "
After giving her the info she sweetly talks to me
trying to calm me down so I won't be as freaked out.

With in minutes, I hear sirens and I get off the phone.
Answering the door to a big tall police officer
He picks me up and asks " and what seems to be troubling you? "
I go through my account with what I saw and told him everything.
After listening intently for a few minutes
he takes my hand and leads me over next door
and I show him where the pool is.

I was absolutely shocked at what I saw.
The dead body was gone and all traces seemed to vanish
Frantically looking around I lead him all over the backyard
Finally finding the body which was bloated and soaking wet.
Gasping in horror at what I did, I told him the description of
the person I saw committing the murder.

After all that excitement and being left home alone,
I was taken down to the police station and questioned even more.
As I give the recollection of what I saw again, in full details
the description of the suspect and how I saw him etc.

After that long winded night, I end up sleeping at the station
feeling better than I could ever have been at home.
When I was released and taken back home,
a strange message on a slice of notebook paper
was left on my front door pinned with a nail.
the message said:

" I know that you saw what I did!
How dare you call the police on me!
I will get you next! "

Feeling extremely freaked out and shaking uncontrollably,
I called the police officer back to my house
to show him the note and trembled in fear.
" I I don't feel safe here anymore.
Could you please take me to my grandma's. "
The police officer merely nodded and called the detectives over.

After bagging the evidence and everything,
I was taken to my safe haven.
Feeling safe & relaxed again, my grandma
takes me to the nearest play house and
being a small kid I had a blast playing there.

After what seemed like forever to me
which was merely a few days later,
I was sent home and my parents were still not back.
I locked all the doors, windows, and blocked
every single entry way possible to feel safe.
Cowering in the corner of my house with a baseball bat
I waited in anticipation for the murder to come after me.

Then I heard it.
At first I thought I was paranoid with delusion
But out of the shadows
and into the sliver of moonlight
was the killer I witnessed.

I swung my baseball bat as hard as I could,
trying to knock out his legs from out underneath him
but I failed and he merely grunted by absorbing the blow

Frantically I called 911
as fast as I could and screamed for " HELP!!!!! "
But it never arrived.
He grinned viciously.
He light up a cigarette and blew the smoke right at me
" Hey kid if you never looked out the window,
I wouldn't have to do this to you! "

Then he began to explain what he would do to me
First he would first grab me by the collar of my shirt
hang me on the clothesline outside,
then he would draw his favored silver bladed knife,
which shimmered under the moonlight, and cut his initials into me,
then he would proceed to drag me
next door to that pool
and toss me carelessly into the pool;
as I would be anchored with a cloth stuffed down my throat,
so nobody could hear my blood curdling screams,
then he would take a cement block and tie it to my feet,
then he would turn the pool water on and watch
with a mirthless sadistic sick pleasureable smile
as I try to struggle against the chains!

Then before I knew what was happening!
POLICE! DROP YOUR KNIFE NOW!
The suspect drops the knife and is immediately taken down!
" Thanks kid " says the police officer to me.
" You did a good job nabbing this suspect for us.
We've been after this jackass for many years. "

After all that time and being severely shaken
I fall asleep knowing a police officer was watching over me!


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  • Lordviper
    September 4, 2008
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    as always bro you come up with the greatest writes I've ever seen. Keep up your good work.


  • Blooming Poet
    August 19, 2008

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    I love it. and you even explained the moral behind it in your Author notes. I love how this is true also. Wonderful work.
    Molly


  • Melodies
    August 17, 2008

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    I am shocked and astonished!


    You are very brave to tell the story because just remembering it must have been horrible. Thank you for telling us because now I realize my neighbors are not so bad after all. By the way, you wrote this story absolutely splendidly fine.


  • Mary Jane.
    August 17, 2008

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    wow. you deserve like a million hugs just writing about this has to be emotional. even all these years later. it made me scared just reading it (doesn't help that while i was doing so the prison alarm signaling an escaped convict went off and the prison is about a 5 minute walk away). So now I'm completely freaked out but no worries. Great job hun. I'm proud of you. hehe.
    Love,
    Sarah


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    August 15, 2008

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    this would have been a hell of an experience hun
    and i went through things like this as a kid but i went through it rather daily and you get used to it but it is scary first time but i know where your coming from with this
    all my love
    kitty xxx


  • dark tigress
    August 15, 2008

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    wow

    great poem about children being left alone in which should never happen to any child but glad ur still alive and doing alright. its a great poem even parents should read this poem. and well too bad u can't talk to ur parents too much about personal things but since that day im guessing u and ur sis r a bit closer now than u guys were back than. great write


  • tSkye
    August 15, 2008

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    well that would be enuf to scar u for life
    im not sleepin tonight
    its really good that ur able to share ur story
    sleep tight
    SKy


  • Ravenblood
    August 14, 2008

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    Well, thats a story and a half. very nightmarish. although i agree with Birgitte and i would suggest putting quotation marks in whenever someone is speaking.

    good poem.


  • Beating gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    Wow! What a story! This is the kind of things that nightmares are made of, and I cannot believe that this actually happened to you. How awful! I would be scared for life everytime darkness hits!

    The only constructive thing I can give you, is to put "" around the spoken parts, and maybe make sections, so that the story is easily read and understood.


  • Re-invention silver member
    August 14, 2008

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    wow.. this reminded me of Disturbia... intense and wow... real! thanks for sharing hun... nicely done~!


  • Dmonik
    August 14, 2008

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    Holy motherfucking donkey bollocks!
    That is some serious shit fir a 10 year old to deal with.... Kudos to you for writing about it...having to relieve it to write etc...If it was me, I'd probably be on god knows how many types of pills (Though, in all honesty, I wouldn't need that as an excuse )
    This is dark, painful and seriously...this is heartbreaking, and it takes a lot to hit me like this piece did...

    Bravo Tiger.

    'D'

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