I chanced to overhear the vespers
of the moon
. . . imploring
that he might reach her
curving surface
and drown
beneath her seas--
gasping.
. . .gasping.
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A contest entry
- solitude by tara wilson.
2700 points, ended August 20, 2008, 42 entries
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The moon want's to bathe within are seas
How wonderfully original, very unique indeed
Splendid imagery and word play.
Best of wishes to you.
Tony
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I love the personification in this piece, well done...wonderful take with the moon, I am sure if he was a male, he would definately feel this way about a woman, do you mean Earth?!! I see him circling her..lolol
...lol...thanks Ten, for this entry
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Yep, I mean the earth. But didn't say intentionally. And I guess most people think of the moon as a gal, but for me, in the moment of THIS poem, I thought if it as a guy.
And yep, you got the exact imagery that was in MY silly head, too! -
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lolol....I always think of the moon as male, actually, and Earth as female, too..lol
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Intense and beautiful! This is a truly memorable piece... fantastic!
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Oh wow this is just stunning! As always!
You have taken the prompt and writtten such a special piece.
All the best with this
gaylene
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You certainly got that prompt by the throat.
Thanks for this.
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The first line is so gentle "vespers of the moon" and the imagery is both bold and sensual. And the last two words allow the reader to imagine all types of scenerios...do they finally meet? A lovely short poem. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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enigmatic
I admit ___ I got lost on this one. 'However, I inadvertently experienced solitude. Which was your point / "hope I'm not giving credit unduly." lol
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there is splendid austerity on the moon...empty seas...and then the full water and moonlight of the earth such a wonderful image for solitude...PK
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