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Night Sky Serenade

Upon our love stars shine
late at night
our love's written across the skies
penned for your heart and mine
gleaming bright
softly romantic the moon sighs.

Watching over our love
for She knows
we have found ethereal bliss
given from Her above,
still it grows
deep in the magic of our kiss.

Our love is forever
stars that burn
in each other's body, soul and mind
til the end of never
as we yearn,
our hearts will always be entwined.

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Form I found at shadowpoetry called a tri-fall thought I'd give it a try

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  • Flowergirl
    April 8

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    vey nice work i lvoe ti this is great work i love the background it is very cool nice job and keep it up....


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    February 1

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    beautiful

    Wow, I really enjoyed reading this.
    Your write is full of so much emotion and I really enjoyed this stanza...

    Watching over our love
    for She knows
    we have found ethereal bliss
    given from Her above,
    still it grows
    deep in the magic of our kiss.....

    Such beautiful wording.
    You have provided the reader with great visuals, great emotions felt and all in all, it was a pleasure to read, and I thank you for sharing your heart and voice with us.

    Much love to you and many blessings of happiness also.
    Angel-anne


  • Philip K Starck
    August 15, 2008

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    Great romantic piece!! Interesting form. I'll have to check into that more.
    I think maybe for a title;

    Night Sky Serenade

    Good luck! and keep writing.


  • alesana
    August 15, 2008

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    this is great as for a title i have no clue sorry. maybe forever our hearts in chains... .sorry great poem though it gave me chills


  • sixtimesseven
    August 14, 2008

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    this is beautiful love here.
    i wish the set up colorwise wasn't
    so dark. it's such a light
    romantic story.


  • poetrandy
    August 14, 2008

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    Re: Untitled

    Nice, but another love poem with the moon and forever love! Good job of poetry here, nice words, interesting construction, a little trite and somewhat overused metaphors! I like the sound of this one!


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 14, 2008
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    awww this is so beauitufl, wonderfull written
    keep it up and take care,
    Stephanie ♥


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    I need a title too... will you suggest one? (currently known as '...' !)

    I really like 'Til the End of Never'.
    It's a good line, and I think it would work.


  • sassykitty
    August 14, 2008

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    Very evocative and successful descriptive detail and imagery here really capture the mood and tone of this. I tend to go for very short titles but not so sure if that style would suit this. Perhaps the use of a verb or Entwined - simple but capturing the soul of the piece? Well crafted and structured, this was very sensuous indeed.


  • insainebuni
    August 14, 2008

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    this is very heartfelt,
    i enjoyed reading it.
    so much is covered so well in such a short time,
    maybe that could make your title,
    "so much to say so little words"
    idk that's really not my strong point.
    i really liked it though.

    *dee*


  • ourgirlFriday
    August 14, 2008
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    Hmmmm...

    Moonlight Love, Starlit Love, Ethereal Bliss...
    Something from the poem would make the title.

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