Cry out, lovers, one and all,
For life is nothing but a contest
And to win, you must lose yourself.
You must lay aside your feelings
And swallow your fears
Get over yourself and
Take another step
The pavement isn't that hot.
Author notes
This is a surreal poem. According to http://www.dictionary.reference.com, this means: having the disorienting, hallucinatory quality of a dream; unreal; fantastic.
This is a fairly good description, but not a full one. I hope this helps.
In poetry, surrealism is a style a writer uses for himself. The poem means something specific to him, but it is not meant for the reader to feel the same ways as in other styles of poetry. A surreal poem will mean something different to each reader. That is the beauty of it!
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Just to clarify, this is not surrealist poetry. Your definition of surreal, surely, is correct, but the movement of literary surrealism dealt with the workings of the subconscious and birthed itself from the ashes of Dadaism. It is not concrete, as what you have written, but primal, abstract, and automatic (automatic in the sense of "automatic writing"--a letting go of conscious control of one's own thoughts)... almost anti-art, depending on whom you ask.
If you'd like examples of surrealism, I recommend many of the French surrealists, particularly Breton, who was believed to many ways to have started the poetic movement. Interesting precursors a la Rimbaud and Baudelaire are also worth reading. There are very few true American surrealists, but those that took from surrealism would include Auden, Ginsberg, Dylan Thomas, Lorca, and Bly... as examples. There are others.
In any case, I just wanted to clarify your definition of the surrealist movement. Certainly check out some of the poets I mentioned--they make for good, although sometimes frustrating, reading.
Oh! Also. Berryman's "Dream Poems" are a type of automatic writing associated with surrealism. Definitely worth reading. -
I think you mean "lose" not "loose." I think I like the new form. I love the last line. Great write.
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And to win, you must loose yourself.
You must lay aside your feelings
And swallow your fears
I like that part
but "loose" should be "lose"... -
Very good lass,
This says to me that life is a carnival, two bits a shot....let it roll.....
when ya aint got nothin
ya got nothin to lose.
Really good job,
put me in a daring mood....lol
Many blessings,
LOWELL -
Awesome write...The last line is great! Fantastic
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Wow. I'm loving the last line!!
It's true that life is a contest. And it's sad really...
Get over yourself is something that more people need to be told I think...
I like this. Especially the was I percieve the word lose to have two meanings... Clever line.
(Will you try mine? It's '...' - needs a title!!)
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