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Luna's Allurement


Sky awaits one tangled moment,
where two soul’s sighs become a roar
and moonbeam glances a silver streak,
across taught sinews and tendrils,
painting adoration in gilt and velvet black.

The moonlit sky gives lovers breath,
under discreet blanket of midnight stars,
Luna’s eyes unblinking, a knowing smile,
that the sun strides the firmament in jealousy,
never witnessing loves tender nighttime touch.


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Prompt 5: ~moon's breath slips into a *sigh*
Quote Credit: perfectsunset

I'm not keen on the title for this piece, it's a bit meh, but I can't think of anything else (I'm rubbish at titles)

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 15, 2008

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    Anything cosmic gets my vote. Love stars, the moon and the sun, they hold a lot of inner depth and meaning we cannot truly analyze.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    Wow; this was absolutely beautiful in your thoughts, imagery & depth you pulled into this piece.
    Your metaphors were excellent & great use of poetic devices.

    Amazing write!!

    Best of luck & thank you for entering


    • Glasyalabolas
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you very much. I wasn't sure about the title (as usual) or the length, but it re-reading it, it seems comfortable at the length it is (if that makes any sense).