There's somthing in Mommy's eye she's crying again today
her record player is broken there's only one song it will play
the song they used to dance to Mommy and my Dad
and I wonder if it's all my fault that Mommys kinda sad
I found Daddy's wedding ring lost behind the couch
I guess he must've of dropped it before he walked on out
he must be working real hard I've not seen him for days
I've painted him a picture for another fridge display
Chorus
Maybe if I'd ate my greens and put my toys away
maybe if I'd brushed my teeth at least twice a day
maybe if I hadn't stamped my foot outside the candy store
when Mommy bought me all she could and I still cried out for more
maybe if I'd not been bad and done the things I had
then Mommy wouldn't be crying and I'd still have my Dad
maybe if I'd said my prayers and closed my eyes real tight
then Daddy would've come on home and everything would be alright
Second Verse
I climbed in Daddy's wardrobe there's lots of room in there
and where his pants and shirts once hung there's hangers swinging bare
they must be at the laundrette spinning round getting clean
washing out that lipstick a color Mommy had never seen
Washing out that perfume Mommy said was just cheap scent
and I hope it cleans out all those words I'm sure they never meant
I'm sitting on the stairs again waiting for Daddy to arrive
he'll be home real soon that factory whistle blows at five
Chorus
Maybe if I'd ate my greens and put my toys away
maybe if I'd brushed my teeth at least twice a day
maybe if I hadn't stamped my foot outside the candy store
when Mommy bought me all she could and I still cried out for more
maybe if I'd not been bad and done the things I had
then Mommy wouldn't be crying and I'd still have my Dad
maybe if I'd said my prayers and closed my eyes real tight
then Daddy would've come on home and everything would be alright
Third Verse
But Daddy doesn't come just some envelopes stamped in red
but I keep one eye on the door as Mommy carries me up to bed
Mommy reads me a story but I guess it ain't the same
and I know she dreams of Daddy too I hear her call his name
We're gonna live with Grandma because we can't pay the rent
we're gonna ride a Greyhound bus on the tickets Grandma sent
I'm gonna ask that driver to stop at those factory gates
so I can say sorry to Daddy for all of my mistakes
Author notes
Waiting on a singer with a tune
option 1
Please tell me what you think
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So sad and way too real.
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not your fault..although I have been in this daze before. its beautiful and so sad Quill
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Extremely touching ... sensitive .. and honest... Can feel the pain of wishing for something that seems to be out of reach... Thanks for sharing .. Good Luck!
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It's very unusual to find a poem that works as lyrics - or lyrics that work as well ,as poetry. I think you've tapped a great way to present your work in a new and different way, with the music now added.
The child's point of view is wonderfully well presented, maintaining sadness without descending into sentimentality. Very well done.
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I just wanted to say that I am not sure how you got removed from my finalist list, but you did win bronze. Thanks for entering!
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This is fantastic. Being divorced with children reading your words captured alot of the things they verbalized to me during the initial seperation. Awesome job!! They say children usually blame themselves for a divorce and you have capture that emotional turmoil for the child. Best wishes in the contest.
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I know I commented on this before, but since you entered my contest I wanted to say again how beautifully written this is. The emotion and point of view (thinking like a child) help make it a very strong write. Great job!
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Beautifully sad song, just the way country music should be. I hope to someday hear this on the radio, it definitely deserves to be!!! Wonderful job!
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This was so sad. I about cried. You really should try to get it recorded and out there on the radio.
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This was very well written, in my opinion...
Besides that, I could relate in a way that, well...darn you! I didn't want to bring up those emotions!
As an artist and writer, you did your job!
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Something Rhymed
I suppose this comes across as a country lyric due to the several colloquial US-isms in evidence - but to me, these poignant observations - as seen from the innocent eyes of this child, lend themselves well to a tune by an almost forgotten genius - Gilbert O'Sullivan. I'm sure this could be worked up into a deeply moving, piano based song. Well written and good luck!
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One o' them sad ol' country songs like "Heartache by the Numbers." Another good write waiting for a tune. Happy trails
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Very touching
Really showed a depth of feeling about how the actions of adults/parents affect their children, sometimes without them ever realising it. I know, I never knew my Father, he left when I was only 3 years old. I never met him. Sad but true.
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sorry forgot the clappies
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this is awesome as a poem and as lyrics. its so well put together. I love it!
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Another of your wonderful songs waiting for a singer. All the best with this one, lets hope someone will want to write some music for it.
Sue
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Well written~
Thanks for sharing this write; does have a country feel to it. Good luck.
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Gracious man, brake m' heart why don't ya! Ah but this is a good poem/song...I don't know where you come up with this stuff but it's good. Nicely written.
, Dannie
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Sad lyrics Craig,had me almost crying, a wonderful country type of write.Well written...Jeff
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