The thrumming sound of
rushing blood fills my ears.
My eyes see the world
titian tinged.
Reason is gone
only the need to hurt,
to make someone else
feel pain.
It is not a sharing I seek
for in this immortal state
I feel nothing…
but the need.
A second, then two…
breathing slows
the rage passes
and the rationalization
begins.
Author notes
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: "Unravelling Fire II" by carts on www.deviantart.com
NTE 20 lines
A contest entry
- Deep Thought PIF by Errant Panther.
610 points, ended August 17, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
Comments
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very creative way to express the way that frustration burns like a raging fire inside one's mind before the contemplative reflexes kick in and reason becomes clear.
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Oh, thank goodness...for that ending. It was almost getting scary
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Well I think we can all relate to this!!! I have only snapped like this a couple of times in my life....Thank God!!! Very well done and best wishes
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hmmm this sounds very familiar, perhaps like I felt like this morning.. lol Great take on the prompt, very fitting..
good luck in the contest my lover
kat
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