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Spinning World

The world is spinning
With me in the middle
Your words are killing
Splitting me in half

 

Meaning the world to you

You just sit and laugh

While I'm feeling blue

Cause you know what you said ain't true

 

The world stands still

Me and you still in time

Everyone has been killed

Now its time to say goodbye

 

Because everything you said was a lie

And everyone standing beside

Has been killed without knowing why

They died

 

"I mean the world to you, but to me you mean nothing"

 

 

 

 

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  • trekkergirl silver member
    November 1

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    oh such a sad feeling to mean the world to someone yet know that they mean nothing to you. Exactly how does one let down someone easily. I don't know. Good job in writing this. Thanks for sharing it.


  • Makaskill
    September 4
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    A nice write...filled with hope,pain and elements of vindictivity...Enjoyed the read...Shalom


  • DreamCatcher6
    August 18
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    Beautiful...I can feel the pain and the hope same time. Good luck in the contest

  • poetrandy gold member
    August 18

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    Re: Spinning World

    Good poem, Lislane! Great title and last line! Interesting structure and subject! The metaphor seems a little stretched and not totally developed, however. The poem conveys a lot of emotion and says some meaninful things and I like the change / twist at the end. To me the rhymes don't fit perfectly -- maybe they are just a little forced or something! Great wording and fine poetry effort, Nice work!


  • Liger Child
    August 16
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    Snaps Up

    nice. It flowed really well. Kudos to you on this one
  • nycvoice
    August 16

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    so good

    yea, this is very good. this poem is sincere and he does not cover flaws of realities. poetry says about all aspects of lives. everything in life is needed. love beautify life and suffering to educate and teaches us.

  • Sundown Dragon silver member
    August 15
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    ooh very well written sweetness
    well done

  • LovesPlayToy
    August 15
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    wow this is intense.... great job!!!!!

    GOOOD LUCK ON THE CONTEST


  • checkmate
    August 15

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    woah. this is really powerful. great work loved it from start to end!!!


  • Christina luvs you
    August 15

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    this is great, u kno id love to see it in dirty pretty form! good job with this and good luck
    xoxo- christina

  • bloved
    August 14
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    This was very sweet.

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Godsemogurl
    August 14

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    Great Poem. I believe I know which quote you chose. Thank you for entering into my contest and good luck!
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