There’s a movement in the trees
Stronger brisk than touch of leaves
As pitch sways on distant call
Casts a shadow on it all
Hope is felt within the breeze
Tends to blow when it well please
Deceit’s charm precedes the fall
Casting shadows on it all
Once jet swept my breath away
Know the time, the very day
Twined and curled up in a ball
Cast with shadows on the wall
Precious Light broke through decay
Burned old dark folly away
Never claimed to know it all
Cast in shadows on the wall
Author notes
Graphic Arts Credit: "Shadows of Sue and Dougie"
http://search.msn.com/images/results.aspx?q=shadows&FORM=MSNH&mkt=en-US#focal=72af86d545ebe46b019d85fda370be61&furl=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.edinphoto.org.uk%2F0_P%2F0_photographers_sue_and_doug_shadows.jpg
I was playing around with creating a new form. I think I did but I am unable to tell you how to write it other than it being seven (7) syllables per line of a quatrain. The word "CAST" (first word in last line of each quatrain) is used in past, present, and future tense. Four Quatrains create the poem with a rhyme pattern:
aabB
aabB
ccbb
ccbb
Ummm... I think that might do it! I call this form:
"PrimeRhyme"
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excellent
Very deep
Indeed everything we do cast a shadow well almost
Excellent as always sis
Love ya muchly
Susan~~~
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The mood you've created goes perfectly with photo. Sometimes the shadow I cast is my only connection with reality. I may be out in left field but I got the feeling you, like I, have made that mark on the wall in permanent ink. Be it good or bad it's there for all to see. Excellent work my friend.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Bravo
As I read this it somehow reads like the witches throughout Macbeth.I guess two greats think alike. PrimeRhyme will go down in time as being so sublime that you can't be a nickel-and-dime (poet) and you gotta climb to even acheive this rhyme in your lifetime, thanx ,conni
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yeah yeah!
I for one love your 'new' form, and the name! (better hurry and get a patent! l.o.l.) great piece of writing my friend, I truly enjoyed it.
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this was a good piece I think it was deep. everything we do seems to cast a shadow. great job.
p.s. I am not going to be in town in august. not real sure when I am going to be.
mj
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ahhh ok, seems the verb is the thing... seven to a line, divine... has a nice feeling, a moving kind of rhythm...will give it a try...PK
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This is a PrimeTime for a PrimeRhyme for a sister who's Primal call isn't rhyme at all but to teach through actions like the finger puppets cast upon these very halls. You know, these halls within these walls in a house we call All... Ha-ha... A poet's last call. (You know they like bars). Three cheers for the incredible... The unforgettable... Lady who do's all things that other's don't's cousin they cain't... I ain't playing...
Write on, sis.
Dez
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Hey Renee
Well, if that is what becomes of too much time on one's hands, I'm going to have to subscribe to some of that right away!
Loved this.
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hehe too much time on your hands Renee
But beautifully done anyway 
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