Our connection could have been
simply an endless, talkative kiss, by parables of mouths,
or a magic pause, held within the punctuation of our eyes
and brows, but we, having the flair of true poets,
know how to extend our intercommunication with appositives,
interdependent and dependent clauses intermingled,
with special care to avoid run-ons,
comma splices and dangling modifiers;
keeping our parallel structures in mind
-- to be precise, to be caring, to be thorough --
our love is being expressed passionately
in one sentence only ...
Author notes
Please kiss me into silence! GRIN
In a list
A contest entry
- Sentence by crivanea.
300 points, ended August 21, 2008, 32 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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love it!!
this is a pretty amazing poem! very cleverly and skillfully written. this part kind of confused me though:
appositives,
interdependent and dependent clauses intermingled,
with special care to avoid run-ons,
comma splices and dangling modifiers;
to me, it's as if you're just listing various grammar components. is standard, "correct" punctuation usage really that important to you in a good poem? it makes writing sound more like a science than an art. -
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Thank you for reading and commenting ...
I love punctuation. It gives the reader not a vague stream of words rushing down a page, but clear-cut meanings. In that way it is much easier to focus on the message, for one does not have to guess about enjambments and phrasings. OF COURSE I sometimes write blank poems -- without using capitalization OR punctuation -- because the topic may ask for a stripped poem. But then LINE BREAKS are very important.
Writing IS a science, but it is also and ART. And I think with creativity, constant finger exercises and intuition one may become near perfect.
ALL souls are poets. It is only a matter of finding your own voice.
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Only you...
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wow..not even sure if that is one complete sentece..but hey..that is amazing!..love it..very creative..and def. written by a true poet..nice job..and thnx for entering
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Believe me ... it IS one setence ...
and I could have go on forever LOL but I considered your patience
Thank you SO much for the gold trophy and the glitter. It was such a joy to enter. Your contests are so creative ... well done!
Thank you also for adding me as a favorite. I shall follow your example
Love
Myra
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Oh if I could write the immortal blessings of your lips my sentences would run on forever. I think you've told the story of countless connections on the net in one sentence. Extremely clever M'Lady.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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One sentence like this could last a lifetime.
I love it.
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No, usually we poets express ourselves in sentence fragments.
What a delightful write. You have most certainly made my day. But, then, you usually do with your poetry. You are a gem!
Garrison
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But don't you know, Garrison ...
we are writing that fragments in one Sentence for Him? As I said between the lines: no matter how we punctuate or structure, the Holy Kiss lingers eternally, and moves within us in mysterious ways ...
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i am so impressed with your skill and abilities and i marvel at your creative nature; how your words evoke so brilliantly, how my heart becomes completely engaged while reading.
blessings and best wishes,
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For a Boeremeisie...
You sure got an excellent command of the English language! I think this is fabulous, you got a talent and a half honey! good luck
Oh ya, here's a soentjie vir yoe
(as jy het arsom genoeg....)
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Pause for breath, come up for air!! That was some sentence Myra, and I thought you a woman of few words lol.Well done and good luck in the contest.
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Good luck in the contest sweet lady
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Long and lingering, just like a kiss should be--a clever and delightful sentence/poem.
Warmest regards,
Bill
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You never disappoint me in your writing Myra you are one of my favorite poets on this sight. I am not just saying this either your heart always shines through and portrays such deepth meaning and emotion through love and beauty. ♥
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Beautiful! The topic of written romance is tempting for poets to write about, but you really did this in an original way.
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i love thiis poem it is so entertaining!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i LOVE it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! great job
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; I love it, but you definetly had to post it, or I would have stopped you at intercommunication WITH the long kiss Goodmorning. It is very Myra, and I claim it for My Own. 
I love you
Devon
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lol this is just delightful and makes me want to say it all so breathlessly then close my eyes and wait for the kiss to stop it all Love, C
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