Droplets of water funneling
as to an open fountain
into your hood-like mouth
yellow tongue lapping
dews
fresh from morning.
Mistress of light
magnificent and pure
allow me your pleasure
captured with eyes and scented
hues.
(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
August 13, 2008
A contest entry
- PIF contest: Picture~Inspired by Night Hope.
1500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hoodwinked!
This is a beautiful poetic response to the contest picture prompt. How exquisitly you have painted this delicate word picture with such fitting imagery. Well Done!
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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First of all, let me thank you for your entry into my contest. I appreciate the time & effort that you spent on your poem immensely, because I completely recognize & understand the symptoms as being my own, as well. lol
Also, please let me apologize & ask for your understanding this somewhat generic comment; I have a migraine & need to get this contest judged so I can get to bed. I don't have a lot of time or energy to be online these days. Which is partly why I'm commenting at 3 am.
This is the part that pulled me into the poem the most:
"Droplets of water funneling
as to an open fountain
into your hood-like mouth
yellow tongue lapping
dews
fresh from morning."
A very vivid visual, ripe with promise. I thank you sincerely for sharing this part of your Self with the rest of us lost, angelic souls...Keep writing...This world needs all the Poets & Scribes it can hold. Especially now.
Be good to yourself & those around you; it really does matter, as you know.
~ Wanda
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Wanda
Thank you Wanda ! This contest was a joy to enter and write. many blessings. Debby
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Wow, such a powerful impact. I most love the fourth stanza.
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Pania
Thankyou !!
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This was really beautiful.. I love how soft it sounds when it is read out load.. You really did a wonderful job with this write.. I really enjoyed reading it.. best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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Angel
Thank you so much ! I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece. Blessings. d
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