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We Would Gamble

I do not gamble any more

The stakes are not half as meaningful
As those nights when you came home

With three bags of sour patch kids
And we played blackjack in the dining room
With the red ones up for stake

And night by night, I'd lose every hand
My pile would grow smaller every time we dealt
It never mattered, hit or stay
I would end the evening with powdered sugar and a smile

And night by night, I'd lose every hand
But everything was alright
For you see, we played for reds
And the green ones were my delight

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  • whiterabbit.
    August 26, 2008

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    I love this. It's so cute it made me smile. I love the way you've written it and the ending is just adorable. Brilliant write and thanks for entering.

  • RIP-sanity
    August 15, 2008

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    This made me smile. Felt the last line could use a tweak, just a personal preference thing not an actual criticism, don't like "delight" but in general, very sweet images.