Flowers red and gold
Scream in the sweating night sky
One thousand heart beats
A scroll unfolds in the night
The clouds are filled with applause
Author notes
A poem inspired by the opening ceremonies of the Summer Olympics. My only complaint was that Sarah Brightman sang. I would have complained about it in the poem, but her name has no zen.
Here's a photo (by ERICH SCHLEGEL/DMN)in case you missed the show! http://www.dallasnews.com/sharedcontent/dws/img/v3/08-09-2008.n1a_09Olympic_2.GMN2F1IF8.1.jpg
In a list
A contest entry
- Summer Games Tanka Quickie PIF by carole21.
850 points, ended August 20, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts anyone?
Comments
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oh most excellent take
lovely such use of color and movemnet contained in so few words , truly lovley
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Oh, I absolutely loved the opening ceremony! I never did get to watch it all the way through, but from what I saw it was breath taking, just like this tanka! A lovely write.
-Sadien
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This was beautiful, you really captured a wonderful image. I loved the third line, the idea of all the hearts beating a once was really wonderful. I also really liked the final line, the concept of the clouds being filled with applause was magical. Great work and congratulations on the silver. Good job x
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nice write for the prompt . . thanks for the contest entry . .
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