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summer’s here Haiku

I feel warmth fullness
summer's here then so am I
days lengthen to night

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Contest Poem: Option 1 -- more or less traditional Haiku with 5-7-5 syllable scheme

A contest entry

Do you like summer?

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  • Papers
    August 13, 2008

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    Hm, if only I felt the same way about summer. Haha! You expressed what you, and I'm sure many others, feel about this season in your words. A great write and good luck!


  • yukitosumi
    August 13, 2008

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    From reading other haiku and senryu etc in this contest, I've learned to take my time reading them aloud. Were you the one who wrote the poem about the owl? I can only go on style since it's an anonymous contest LOL. I also need to pick up an Australian dictionary, apparently.
    I cannot thank you and all the entrants enough for your poems! I feel like I'm learning so much!
    For instance, the first line might seem weird to me at first, just looking at it, but then I read it out loud. Because one has to physically pause between the words "warmth" and "fullness" it just works well. Then because of the linguistic construction of the second line it flows much more quickly, like water running down hill. Then the third line is more like the first where "lengthen" causes the same sort of pause.
    I wonder, was that intentional? If not it won't affect my very high opinion of the piece lol I'm just trying to learn more about how the minds of haiku-writers work.
    Best wishes,
    El