My heart is awakened, by the whispering of your mind.
In the silent hours, as you lay your head to dream
It seems,
My arms reach out into the dark of night.
I find you're not there, grip only air.
The scent of you lingers in my brain
Filling my heart with longing
Making me more insane. And then...
Then a crack of the door, and the glimmer of light
Intrudes into the night.
My breath catches in the air,
And suddenly....you are there!
Throw open that door! Let that light shine in!
Lay your love on me
Let me feel your soft skin.
Let me drink in your soul as we melt into one,
And smile 'cause it's like we've been warmed by the sun.
Love me tonight....Love me tomorrow....Love me forever.
How does this poem make you feel? What was your general impression?
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Delightful!!
Ahhh,,,,the joys of new love. You have captured that sense of anticipation and wonder that comes with new love. -
wow simply loved it
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Aw, I really liked the way you described the sensation of waiting and longing for the person you love and the way the emotions changed when that person arrived. Well expressed, appropriate use of language throughout. Thought the ending line was particularly effective. Excellent imagery and flow. Thanks for sharing.
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thank you for your review! I appreciate that you took the time to read and respond.
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You truly do have a lovely way of expressing yourself, and this write is no exception! In fact it is most beautiful! The imagery, flow, rhyme, and warmth of love expressed here is outstanding...Magnificent!..Bookmark!
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This was out of the box for me! Thanks for reading and the encouraging words!
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Thanks so much! I need all the new fans I can get!!!Peace! -
A beautiful expression of a longing love felt through inspiring thoughts. You create soft images with your words of night and light. Nice form and rhyme. well done...alby
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Thank you so much for reading!
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Simply beautiful, I really enjoyed
reading this poem from you. Thanks
a lot for sharing it here and keep
up the wonderful work!
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I agree you have talent, and a foundation for this poem to win...good luck
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I find you're not there, grip only air.
Love the style. Loved everything especially,
"I find you're not there, grip only air"
Powerful imagery.
I felt the beauty in this from start to finish.
You are talented.
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I wish this every night before I go to sleep b/c of my past I miss the one i love and she is more than just far far away...Amazing poem!!!
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Lovely!
I loved the way you showed anticipation. At first I thought it was about longing and loneliness but then as I read on it was about longing and love.... How inspiring, sensual and empowering! Great write!
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