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Wrong Girl

like I used to,
like the night,
in the dark,
blinds closed,
bodies sweating
lips touching,
melting into each other
where you meets me,
liquid love filtering
down my outstretched thighs,
warming my heart,
my eyes,
filtering out the scene
removing your hate,
your indiffrence
your love,
you slid in,
tasting forbidden fruit,
sucking adultrys sweet tit,
leaving hickeys
you fucked her
until the dark of night
when you loved me best
loved me hardest
and came
in my willing arms.

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response to JBudRos' poem Right Eyes

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  • K-9
    August 20, 2008

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    I liked this poem when I read it as a comment. After reading more of the poetry that you left this on, I pray that you are not falling for it. He is a predator and knows not the meaning of love. He may try to plead that he didn't harm "A", but you know for a certainty what he did to you and that should tell you exactly what he is capable of. If he truly did love you he wouldn't be here stalking you. He would disappear from your life and not continue his abuse of your emotions. Just one dog's opinion...
    ~woof


  • DenyMyLove
    August 14, 2008

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    First, let me say that I enjoyed reading this, but, (this is second) it was extremly hard on the eyes! Maybe try darkening the words up a bit? Otherwise a very well written piece!!!!