Left myself behind
found my self in you
my hands are yours
as are my lips
lost in my heart with you.
When
everything is met
nothing is alone
even in the limits
more ahead is shown.
Who am I, no longer was
in searching for my soul,
I find you when you choose me
in secrets, which still unfold.
Yes I worry for my life
sometimes, without your voice!
In meeting you I've fallen
beyond all rational choice.
I'm ever looking to you
ever in concern
ever in amazement
ever hungry to learn.
You push me to my borders
till they break and disappear.
Now love's alive in meaning
there are no doubts to fear.
Should you go,
I should go too,
less tracks all come to stop.
It's long gone now to turn around
un-shatter stone from rock.
Don't stay with my expressions
I could say anything
now I am a babbling fool
just watch me dance and sing.
And though it seems I'm showing you
you show me all the way,
it's me who is the lost one
so sorry if I didn't say.
A contest entry
- true love... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended August 19, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
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beautiful!!!
such a wonderful piece! well written and full of emotions. a great master piece..i loved the line where you stated its me who is the lost one, so sorry if i didnt say...this line speaks out! it shows of such an amazing love that one feel lost ...well said
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Humm..standing in front of mirror and commenting on self as other person..intersting..and convincing as well..well done...
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Wow this is great. The feeling is so wonderfully conveyed. Very sweet.
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Wow..This is more you now
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'it's me who is the lost one
so sorry if I didn't say.'
Your words always say volumes..what more can I say..sigh
Ruby
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The third stanza hit me as very romantic, and sweet. the epitome of true love, the deep connection and finding yourself when you're with another person.
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Thank you very much...
that was rapid!
I must have still been fiddling with the background colours.
Sol
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