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Eulogy

Missing image

Eyes aglow with unbridled lust,
devastating hunger rages within

Lucid thoughts coming to life,

rekindled desire, excitement gushing forth

 

Every sound, scent, every fine detail

beautifully etched, like an artist's portrait

An overwhelming kaleidoscope
of vivid memories needing release...

closely followed by depression

sadness, regret, a deep sense of loss...

"Once was, never again shall be..."
forevermore, your past's eulogy

  

Author notes

19. Drooling Over Ashes
Image Credit:
http://www.albany.edu/faculty/gz580/histdocfilms/bontoc-eulogy.jpg

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  • Cyanide Dreams
    April 7

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    Wow, great write. I enjoyed the message in this poem. The imagery and emotions are superb. Great write and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • Kathraina silver member
    March 26

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    Wow, this piece is really an intense read!
    The emotions and imagery in this are really really strong. Marvelous write!
    Bravo!!!


    ♥ Kate


  • Hetha gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    You really did very well with your prompt and the picture fits your take on it quite well. I can relate quite well with this piece, although I'm not one to dwell in my past, I do prefer to reflect upon it. This shows well the good, the bad and the ups and downs of such a task. Great job and congrats on snagging two golds for it. It was well worth it.


  • Arkbear gold member
    August 15, 2008

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    Sure looks good with two Gold Trophys sitting there

     

    Congrats Dude,

     

    Bear ~


  • etoile
    August 14, 2008

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    this is really good!
    the imagery in this is fantastic
    this is really a very profound poem
    good job on gold.. both times


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    Excellent!!!!!!!!

    This was excellent work my sweet one!
    You have so much talent!

    I loved the concept of what you wrote the prompt was perfect with it.
    I agree with Arkbear eyes that see things others look past.
    Whoohoo!!!! on the Gold!
    Love
    ~Lisa~


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 14, 2008

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    Stellar!

    Every sound, scent, every fine detail
    beautifully etched, like an artist's portrait

    An overwhelming kaleidoscope
    of vivid memories needing release...

    Wow! Stunning write! I'm seriously speechless! Excellent job and good luck!

  • Arkbear gold member
    August 14, 2008
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    Superb penning....not a fan of repeating strong grammar...ie;...*overwhelming*....as it takes my brain backwards....I want to continue moving forward ~

     

    Such powerful depth within the abyss of this write.....only a soul with eyes can write like this.....appreciate your talents...good luck and Bless you,

     

    Bear ~

     

     


    • Xianaria gold member
      August 14, 2008

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      thanks bear ~

      y'know, til just now i didn't realize that i used "overwhelming" twice...that seems a bit overwhelming! i'll see if i can find an appropriate replacement for one of them. i think after a couple hours i was more concerned with narrowing the words to 60, not thinking i used such a word twice!

      ~ tim


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    This is awesome can feel the freshness
    of the beginning to the taste of ashes
    in ones mouth at the end of this.

    Best of luck to you.

    Riftkin


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 13, 2008

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    good luck my guardian angel..


    kat

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