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"Milk"

You're a study in naked colour
butter-soft to the touch of my greedy hand
along your many curves and angles
and one single, rock-hard point
milk flows and arches
to form-fit my curves
and cover me in the skin
you set your lips to
I melt beneath the heat of your mouth
its timbre pleading fever-pitch
and its movement betraying your hunger,
pressure fading into subtle tones
that softly set off shivers
along my electric spine
the fence you touch either side of
before sensation splits it
to allow you deep inside

Author notes

Inspirations-
Brandon. :]
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6DI5MuRF0Tk

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  • Glasyalabolas
    September 27, 2008

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    This is excellently tantalizing though always staying very subtle in the wording to convey the hot visuals.

    Good write.


    • NevaehLenore
      September 27, 2008
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      Subtlety breeds much more sensuality because it forces you to use your imagination. It gets you more hot and bothered by leaving things to your imagination rather than laying it all bare.
      Thank you for the comment, I am glad you enjoyed it.


  • just mercedes gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    Very good - you created a whole world with a word picture here, and it's sensuous and tactile. Well done.


  • xox-emma-xox
    August 23, 2008

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    wow, a very interesting read!! i liked it! a great write, have a great day!\
    Emma


  • OnyxtheForsaken
    August 14, 2008

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    wow very very good work indeed. I loved the word play on the subject; you managed to convey the emotion and the erotica without using the blatantly obvious which can be pretty dam difficult! Excellent!


  • Oden Lucine
    August 13, 2008
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    i loved this poem lots of imagery and power great write hun


  • HpWICKEDangel
    August 13, 2008

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    wow the imergery!!!!
    "along your many curves and angles
    and one single, rock-hard point"
    that part was extremely... ummm vivid.
    this is good girl keep up the good penmanship.
    thanks for sharing.


  • arafura gold member
    August 13, 2008
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    Wow... very sensual and sultry! You write very well.


  • Solidified
    August 13, 2008

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    I loved garbage when I was a little pre-teen, this song must be from their new album, I haven't heard it before.

    The poem is passionate and changes tempo a few times, which gives it kinda the same feel as being physically intimate with another person.

    • NevaehLenore
      August 13, 2008
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      Garbage is amazing. I'm not sure what album that is from, though, I've just downloaded all of their music from the internet.

      I was hoping to convey something of that sort of feeling. Thank you for your kind comment!! :]

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